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Open Poetry #42

a young girl

2islander2
Member Ascendant

since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

0 posted 2008-03-13 03:52 PM

Hey young girl,
Your eyes were lighted
like lamp posts above a highway,
Your youth looked inhabited
by a team of busy researchers
and your beauty delivered
by angels from UPS;
Hey young girl
in this dizzy sunny afternoon
your eyes your youth and beauty
were all we could see from you,
(not the invisible wheelchair
you were sitting in.)

[This message has been edited by 2islander2 (03-13-2008 07:09 PM).]

K-K
Member

since 2008-03-13

Posts 153
Indiana

1 posted 2008-03-13 04:24 PM

Nice tribute. I for one also try to see the person and not the disability myself. Tender

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2008-03-13 05:40 PM

Nice...James

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

3 posted 2008-03-13 06:18 PM

WELCOME TO PIP!

Nice write

ARCTIC WIND

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

4 posted 2008-03-13 09:08 PM

Hi yann. Glad to see you here, I think you will like it. Good choice, I like this one.
Ida

ilsm
Member

since 2008-04-13

Posts 61
UK

5 posted 2008-04-22 07:59 PM

How wonderful to be such a vibrant young person. I hope she knows of your admiration(or at least, felt it from afar).

I didn't think I was going to enjoy this by the time I reached line 4 or 5, but I was hooked well before the end. Great poem!

shyvl
Senior Member

since 2008-04-11

Posts 531
texas, usa

6 posted 2008-04-22 10:47 PM

What great use of imagery in your description. I always love tp read your work
sharyn

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