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Alison
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0 posted 2008-03-10 10:39 PM


song out of tune

discordant harmony
lyrics fall flat
melody rises, sharp
strident tones, hurt

composers pause
soften high notes
embelish low notes
music freed

duet of desire soars

Alison

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1 posted 2008-03-10 10:48 PM


As usual, beautiful! It speaks volumes.
love the read.

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2 posted 2008-03-10 10:50 PM


Thank you, my friend.

A

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3 posted 2008-03-10 11:16 PM


Very nice,
I play music myself and have learned bringing out the notes that are hiden can be beautiful.

Talyn

"Gang aft a-gley,
an lea'e us nought but grief an' pain,
for promised joy"
--Robert Burn

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4 posted 2008-03-11 03:07 AM


Talyn,

Thank you so much for reading and taking the time to share your thoughts.

Alison

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5 posted 2008-03-11 07:24 AM


Alison, this is so good...!
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6 posted 2008-03-11 11:21 AM


Ashamed am I.

Because with my complete and total lack of any music talent, my first thought of G-String was totally different from yours...enjoyed this much more after the first couple lines and "understanding" blossomed...heh, heh.

Kool write, my friend.

jimmy

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7 posted 2008-03-11 11:29 AM


Alison,

This is very nice.  I take it this is the ā€œGā€ string on a musical instrument.  

My girlfriend used to dance in her younger days.  If her ā€œGā€ string snapped, that would be a very bad thing.

This is very good writing.

Bobby

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8 posted 2008-03-11 12:39 PM


Ok, you got me too with the title, being muzickly inclined me self, I should have known better. However, my excuse is it was a combination of the title & author that led me down the garden path....I used to play with a guy ( No, Ali...in a band...) a few years ago that was shall we say artistically challenged, I used to ask him to give me an E flat, & got everything but. Got to the stage where I would say to him, just give me an E and I'll flatten it myself    J
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9 posted 2008-03-11 01:18 PM


:: grins ::

G-string could have been something else, jimmy?

Hmmm, I would NEVER have a suggestive or misleading title.

A



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10 posted 2008-03-11 01:18 PM


Simon,

Thank you.

Hugs,
Alison

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11 posted 2008-03-11 01:19 PM


(grins at Bobby)

I am innocent, I am.

A


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12 posted 2008-03-11 01:23 PM


John,

Thank you and loved the story.  Now, don't you have a poem that you are supposed to be responding to.  I am not nagging or anything, John, just gently reminding you that you have been one-upped.



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13 posted 2008-03-11 03:46 PM


I've snapped a G-String or two in my day and I darn near lost an eye each time! Tuning a guitar can be mighty dangerous! It ain't for the feint of heart! lol

A duet of soaring desire sure beats the heck out of discordant harmony!

May both composers forever play love's song in tune!


Linda

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How could I possibly forget that I have to get 1 up Alison??
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15 posted 2008-03-11 04:15 PM


Sorry, that should read get 1 up BACK on Alison....... I'll get on to it right now,


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16 posted 2008-03-11 05:17 PM


Hmmm, I would NEVER have a suggestive or misleading title.

YOUR words....previously written, speak
volumes!!!!

Good job

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17 posted 2008-03-11 05:19 PM


ms ali-san, my favorite string..the music is lovely...enjoyed it
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18 posted 2008-03-11 08:41 PM


Linda,

Maybe you should wear safety glasses when fussing with your G-string.  You know?  Thanks for sharing the "snap" issue.  

xoxoxo
A

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19 posted 2008-03-11 08:43 PM


John,

Stop uppin'- 1 and hop to it!  Or was that 1 - uppin'?  You know, I get really confused responding to comments sometimes.

It's gotta be me because we ALL know that you are totally sane and on task.  Yep.

A


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20 posted 2008-03-11 08:44 PM


Magnus,

Uh oh.  Is my demurity slipping?

Thank you lots for making me smile.

Alison

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21 posted 2008-03-11 08:45 PM


Hey D

Wanna dance - it takes two to Tango.  Or so they say.  (waltzes off cause it only takes one to waltz away).

A

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22 posted 2008-03-11 10:02 PM


Cute, Alison and that title sure got the men's attention.
                              Ida

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23 posted 2008-03-11 10:58 PM


LOL... I love the play on the title; it suited it perfectly!

Very well done!

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24 posted 2008-03-12 09:46 AM


the title is very Interesting lol..

ARCTIC WIND

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loved this....
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26 posted 2008-03-13 11:41 AM


Nice write dear, not what I was expecting but I enjoyed it all the same. I guess us guys don't relate as well to "musical" G strings. Lol. Take care and Have fun. Steve


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27 posted 2008-03-13 09:49 PM


Thanks, sea.

xoxoxo

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28 posted 2008-03-13 09:52 PM


Hey Steve,

I guess it could be considered a tiny bit suggestive, maybe?  Hope you grinned in spite of your disappointment.  (grins)  GOTCHA!

I am glad that you are back and posting.

Alison

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29 posted 2008-03-13 09:56 PM


AW,

Thanks for looking past the title .. or did you?  (grins)

A

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30 posted 2008-03-14 09:05 AM


This is too cute for words, Enjoyed
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31 posted 2008-03-15 04:23 PM


K-K,

Thanks for peeking in and reading.

A

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