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Open Poetry #42

He Won't Wake Up

openthoughts
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since 2006-01-16

Posts 94
Where the child can be free

0 posted 2008-03-06 05:03 PM

He Won't Wake Up

A man in a suit said
"Go or we're all dead"
And so I went away
That very day

I was given a gun
And told I couldn't run
Must shoot to save the world
Trigger finger curled

Silence broke with a crack
And cries of "fire back"
The air filled up with smoke
Free hell had broke

I killed masked enemy
So they wouldn't kill me
I saw my brother fall
Must kill them all
Must kill them all...

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

1 posted 2008-03-09 10:02 PM

I don't envy a man who must face a battlefield. You've captured the vision well, openthoughts.

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

2 posted 2008-03-09 10:23 PM

Sad very sad. Revenge will hurt more you then the person you hate. Great imagery in this poem!

~Zach~

~*With the wind and my heart at my side. I'll live the life i want*~

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

3 posted 2008-03-09 11:03 PM

Stark and sad. Like Nan, I don't anyone facing a battlefield. This is a poem that makes one think.

Alison

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

4 posted 2008-03-09 11:11 PM

Openthoughts,

That’s the way it is. Good job on this. That’s what the bayonet is used for—to kill.

Bobby

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