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xTr3m3sT
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0 posted 2008-03-09 09:03 AM


(I know I can never see the way god sees or hear the way he hears but I just wanted to give my view on how I think he sees and feels and hears)

Life: in God's view.
With your absolute mind focusing on my reality,
A reality where I am eternal,
Where matter, time, and space, do not apply,
Where I control what everything is and how the outcomes will be.
It is a hectic job that I must face,
Keeping everything in order from start to finish,
Keeping track of the human race and answering calls,
When the pathways of life, death, loss, and hope, are shown in clarity,
With the coherent cries of pain in my ear every day.

While the blasphemies of sin consume my creation,
While the ideas of evolution clearly disown my laws,
While the pain and disrespect you humans show me,
I still love and care for you.
I sent my only son to relinquish you from sin,
Yet this is how you repay me?
Destroying my creation and all the gifts I have given you,
With violence, war, and murder happening every day,
Taking advantage of my good nature whenever you humans are feeling depressed.

Everyday I help humanity with their problems,
I answer calls from the people who believe in me,
Yet some people still use my name in vein.
Humans kill other humans in the name of ''God'',
While I clearly state in my commandments ''Thou shall not kill''.
While humans claim to know the bible and know it well,
humans can't follow the rules that I set forth.
I love the creation that I have made, but someday I will not take this any longer,
I can give life, and I can take it away, as quick as a snake bite.

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Robert E. Jordan
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1 posted 2008-03-09 10:35 AM


Angel,

This is a complex write for such a young person.  I'm impressed.

Look out for sentence fragments.  Look at each sentence and make sure it makes sense.  Many times, stand alone sentence fragments don't.

Bobby

xTr3m3sT
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2 posted 2008-03-09 10:39 AM


Thank you very much =D.

Oh and btw..What are sentence fragments? lol

peter griffin
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3 posted 2008-03-09 11:09 AM


Very nice, well thought out.
xTr3m3sT
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4 posted 2008-03-09 11:10 AM


Thanks
Robert E. Jordan
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5 posted 2008-03-09 03:06 PM


Angel,

Hey, what's going on here.  You fixed the fragments.

Bobby

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6 posted 2008-03-09 03:18 PM


Lol..
JamesMichael
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7 posted 2008-03-09 05:08 PM


Enjoyed your thoughts...James
Artic Wind
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8 posted 2008-03-10 11:28 AM


Enjoyed your thoughts!

ARCTIC WIND

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9 posted 2008-03-10 11:34 AM


In my mind's eye and I can picture God smiling at your show of understanding and appreciation of how difficult His job truly is!

Love and God's Light,

EA



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10 posted 2008-03-10 11:59 AM


enjoyed
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11 posted 2008-03-11 10:01 AM


Thank you for sharing God's view.



Charisma

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