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Universal Need |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! 
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I tasted a sliver of you in tonight’s night, as if a larger piece would be too sweet or too much to handle in one sitting. Like baubles we hung, suspended, dangling before each other, stars lighting passion in eyes unclouded by, what could be oppressive, darkness. Yet, blackness wove with muted strands of the Milky Way, paving a path beyond all that once was familiar, leading us to meteor-strewn dance floors, heated by a sliver of you tonight. While occasionally, a star flew backwards to atmospheres that no longer breathed enough air to sustain our mutual fragility. Like mobiles clinging trustingly to a breeze, we shivered into a motion of eternal desire. --- Alison |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Alison, this is stunning. The visuals it conjures up are ethereal, I have read it over & over and it has the same effect, it will be going in the file for future reading, thanks for posting...John |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms ali-san, the hovering of a haunting...makes me thirst for more..enjoyed this ms |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Alison, This is a well organized poem. The last two lines wrap it up well. Bobby |
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simon Member
since 2008-01-14
Posts 440London, England |
Enjoyed very much. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
While occasionally, a star flew backwards to atmospheres that no longer breathed enough air to sustain our mutual fragility. wow! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Like mobiles clinging trustingly to a breeze, we shivered into a motion of eternal desire. Such a fantastic poem, dear Alison, with a truly special conclusion. Perfect. Love. Margherita |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
One for the library, dear Alison. Absolutely gorgeous imagery and a tender message. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
oops, it pays to check the library thread box before finishing the reply.  |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
A very articulate post this one Alison, I'm like john I read it and reread it. A great poem dear lady, well done. Lindsay |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
John, Thank you. It's always nice to know that someone thinks a poem they have written is a keeper. You make me smile. Alison ____________ D Thank you much. You, too, smile me. A ____________ Thank you so much, Bobby. A ____________ Simon, Thank you. Alison ____________ Aww, Dixie, so many times you have 'wowed!" me. Thank you, darlin. Alison ____________ Margherita, Sometimes we just write the heart. Yes? Hugs and kisses, Alison _____________ Kacy, Thank you. Your words mean the world to me. xoxoxo A _____________ Lindsay, Thank you, my friend. You make me happy that you liked it. Alison |
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TinaTrivett Senior Member
since 2006-07-15
Posts 569 |
Love this...tinkling and magical. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you, Tina. xoxoxoxo - Ali |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Much enjoyed, Alison. Ida |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you much, Ida. xoxoxo A |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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