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Open Poetry #42

they arrested pa!

poddarku
Senior Member

since 2008-01-15

Posts 589
india

0 posted 2008-03-08 12:17 PM

They arrested pa!
The storm on the northern sky
He eyes the yellow painted door,
Fingers quivered on touch of
The ancient woods and red bricks.
The crisscross of the net flap
And, the checkered face behind it….
Waiting path on the rolling
Infinity is waiting to
Take him away to the world
That will be his for one year.

clever talks delay friendship!

effjayel
Senior Member

since 2007-09-30

Posts 1474
At the Crossroads of Infinity

1 posted 2008-03-08 12:25 PM

I hope he gets an early parole Ku...

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

2 posted 2008-03-08 12:31 PM

Poddarku,

This is excellent writing beautifully done. I hope you will get to visit your Pa everyday.

Bobby

LadyTom
Member

since 2008-02-29

Posts 353
LA, CA

3 posted 2008-03-08 12:32 PM

Oh, my dear friend, a tragidy was expressed in such deep thinking and calm mood. and more in between. I wish that I could write one like this. My father was taken away for 2 years when I was 7-9 as wrongly accused spy.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

4 posted 2008-03-08 02:23 PM

Again you succeeded to pack a whole story into just a few lines, creating suspense. You made me pause and wonder and contemplate a tragedy.
Dear Ku, you write with mastery.
Love,
Margherita

Alison

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since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

5 posted 2008-03-08 02:24 PM

You touched me again, poddarku.

Alison

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