A non-cliche (I hope) poem on love

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peter griffin
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since 2008-03-06

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0 posted 2008-03-06 06:08 PM

A non-local network connection in the neural filaments of space-time,
An entangling of consciousness, seperate, distinct, one,
Pre and post quantam measurement reality,
Existing on all planes, in all dimensions,
A dissolution of filters, automatic dials tune to previously unknown frequencies,
The crumbling of egos, photo receptors receiving fresh waves of vision,
Realization of reality, cleansing, filling occupied space anew,
Newly calculated allowance of appreciation, unlimited,
Haze lifted revealing unseen horror and beauty,
Clarity,
That is love.

effjayel
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since 2007-09-30

Posts 1474
At the Crossroads of Infinity

1 posted 2008-03-06 06:12 PM

Peter, welcome to Passions, and what an entrance...this is stunning. The visuals it creates are fantastic. Hope to read more of you in the future....John

peter griffin
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since 2008-03-06

Posts 56

2 posted 2008-03-06 06:15 PM

Thank you. But I wouldn't expect that level again, that's the first thing I've ever written, I don't think I'll match it. But thank you, I appreciate the compliment.

effjayel
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since 2007-09-30

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At the Crossroads of Infinity

3 posted 2008-03-06 06:28 PM

If those are the first 2 you have written, you had better stock up on pens & paper, You are going to need them, especially if you loiter around here. You will get lots of ideas to trigger the muse, trust me...

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

4 posted 2008-03-06 07:06 PM

"The crumbling of egos, photo receptors receiving fresh waves of vision"
WELCOME! and with lines like this, you'll definitely find readers here.
As John said, keep a stockpile of pens and paper!

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

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Listening to every heart

5 posted 2008-03-06 07:10 PM

Welcome to Passions, Peter! My goodness,
you've certainly given me a great idea
as to how to welcome you with a
Very Special Greeting!

I'm looking forward to reading more
of your poetry.

Please check your email!

" It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

peter griffin
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since 2008-03-06

Posts 56

6 posted 2008-03-06 09:58 PM

Wow, thank you guys. I never expected such comments.

secondhanddreampoet
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since 2006-11-07

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a 'Universalist' !

7 posted 2008-03-08 06:10 PM

superb write...you have serious talent, my friend!

I am particularly fond of:

"A non-local network connection in the neural filaments of space-time"

AND:

"Haze lifted revealing unseen horror and beauty(!)"...

yep, that about 'sums it up' for me!

v. serious and long-sustained applause!

[I will look forward to your future 'pennings!']

Falling rain

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since 2008-01-31

Posts 2178
Small town, Illinois

8 posted 2008-03-08 06:30 PM

wow no adjective can ever explain my amazement in this poem!i can't wait for your next poem!!

peter griffin
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since 2008-03-06

Posts 56

9 posted 2008-03-08 10:05 PM

Wow, thank you guys very much.

matronmedusa
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since 2008-03-08

Posts 89
Alabama, USA

10 posted 2008-03-09 02:04 AM

They've already said it all; good job.

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16

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Realm of Supernatural

11 posted 2008-03-09 10:44 AM

WELCOME TO PIP!

ARCTIC WIND

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