Angel's In Heaven Cry In Shame

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

xTr3m3sT
Member

since 2008-03-03

Posts 415

0 posted 2008-03-06 02:28 PM

This is by far the worst I have ever felt.
Anger rises above the ashes of an eternal war.
As I read the comment my so called friend sent.
My head spirals with rage and torment.
He is above the influence and what is next?
Am I going to be a part of this gigantic charade?
Is this going to be my fate?
Ending up being inside a drug institution.
With a white jacket around my body.
Needle marks on my arms and brain cells damaged.
I don't want to be that way and to my despair I say.
Good bye old friend, Until we meet again.

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

1 posted 2008-03-06 05:58 PM

XTr3m3sT,

The thought in this is rather good. Look out for little mistakes, such as capitalizing "Until", that should be "until".

You might also keep an eye out for sentence fragments, that have vague meaning.

I'd also look at the title. These are angels--right? Should angels have anything to be ashamed about?

Bobby

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2008-03-09 05:13 AM

Lots of emotion here...what exactly is this about?...James

xTr3m3sT
Member

since 2008-03-03

Posts 415

3 posted 2008-03-09 09:05 AM

Well, my in real life name is Angel..and my best friend of 5 years started taking drugs...so yeah..

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2008-03-09 09:14 AM

never mind the institution, it could be prison or even death and that's a whole lots worse!

sad write here...I hope your friend can get off the drugs

xTr3m3sT
Member

since 2008-03-03

Posts 415

5 posted 2008-03-09 09:15 AM

Thank you.

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

6 posted 2008-03-09 09:20 AM

Angel,

Good luck to both you and your friend. Stick by your friends side. That will help him recover.

Bobby

xTr3m3sT
Member

since 2008-03-03

Posts 415

7 posted 2008-03-09 09:21 AM

thank you for your words

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

8 posted 2008-03-09 05:23 PM

Stick by your friend but don't let him influence you. I knew so many people who went that way and wasted so much potential.
Ida

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

9 posted 2008-03-09 06:01 PM

Sorry to read of your friends drug involvement...and all of the issues that go with it...hope you can encourage them to the contrary...James

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.