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Felix Has A Thought

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Robert E. Jordan
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Felix is walking home
from a clients place.  

Hes thinking that
hes getting too old
for this.  

He has to find an easier way
to make what he needs.  

He walks past a liquor store
and a gun shop.  

Something clicks in his head.

There's a cop on the corner,
watching him.

Bobby
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I love love love your use of 'something clicks in his head', it follows the gun shop way too well!!! ha ha, very enjoyed poem!
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Spotting a cop can certainly be a deterrent to committing a crime!

Bobby, you've set the scene but didn't spell it out, so to speak, and let the reader make his or her own assumptions.

It was like watching a clip from a movie.

Hopefully happier days will be coming his way.


Linda
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Thanks so much KeyLimeSorbet, I like Key Lime stuff.

Bobby
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Linda,

Yes, happier days are coming--however, probably not for Felix.

He may be entering the shadowy realm of "Behind Closed Doors", in more ways than one, if you know what I mean.

Bobby
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*** Let me guess, Bobby ... um, Felix buys a bottle of liquor, gets drunk, buys a gun and kills the cop ?

*** Second guess ... Felix wrestles with the cop, steals his gun, shoots the cop, then robs the liquor store ?

*** Third try ... Felix calls on his gang from the 'hood' ... they all beat the cop up, steal a bottle of liquor from the frightened liquor store owner, beat the stuffings out of him, steal all the liquor they want and throw a 'hood' party ???

***Next theory ... Felix knows that the cop is on the take, so he asks to borrow his gun, and the cop gives it to him to use while the cop goes whistling down the street (he knows Felix will bring the gun back when he's done.) Felix robs the liquor store owner ... cleans out the cash register, shoots the owner, grabs some liquor and meets up with the cop a block away ... returns the gun ... and pays the cop off ??

Can we choose the version we like best, Bobby ?

FELIX gets sent to prison for his antics !

I don't go to Behind Closed Doors ... but sure hoping that's the fate that Felix faced~

Oh ... Felix has a client ?
Didn't know that~
~*Marge*~
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There may be trouble ahead...
Robert E. Jordan
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Marge Tindal,

None of the above.

Bobby
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Simon,

Yes, you could be correct.

Bobby
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Bobby~
Oh, okay ... I was just trying to come up with a scenario that would explain Felix's thought that he had~

There are endless possibilities~

I'll be interested in knowing what he was thinking~

~*Marge*~

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enjoyed
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What he should do is by a case of  liquor, get the cop drunk, steal his gun & sell it to the gun shop for 4 times what he paid for the booze....
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To the army!!!!
I am still thinking!!
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Youth and desperation are a bad combination.
                                      Ida
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Yo Folks,

Thanks for all the thoughtful speculation.  However, Felix is thinking what he spends a great deal of time thinking about.

He'd like to have something to eat.

Be patient please.

Bobby
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Ida,

What you say is very true.

You're a wise person.

However, don't worry, something good might happen.

Bobby
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LadyTom,

No, not yet.  Of Course Felix will find his way to the Army.

Bobby
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John,

It's a good idea.  However, Felix can't get the idea of eating something out of his hear.  That pretty well crowds out any real planning on his part.

Bobby
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Vandana,

I'm so very pleased you enjoyed the story.  Thanks for reading and commenting.

Bobby
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Marge,

He's thinking about food.  Only food.

Bobby
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smiles... Felix will do the right thing, I'm sure of it!   love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Robert E. Jordan
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Dear RDB,

Yes, Felix does the right thing.

Felix is going to gain a good friend.

Read "Felix and The Cop".

Bobby
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Enjoyed....James
Robert E. Jordan
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Thanks James,  I'm pleased you enjoyed it.

Bobby
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some folk apparently have 'little clue' about the realities of city life for the socio-economically disenfranchised.
 
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