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KeyLimeSorbet
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0 posted 2008-03-06 08:39 AM




It takes far too long for the infatuated one,
to realize her burden is empty.
It is far better for her to stop,
and see that she left it along the path.
It lets her know that it was not meant to be carried all the way
Along her side.
And the empty shell of what used to be a heavy load,
can now be left behind.


There is no reasoning in taking up space,
with something that no longer exists in her life.
A void box is left somewhere along her way,
Now taking on its own burdens.

Never carry your burdens for too long;
They become harder to let go.
And never hold onto something,
That doesn't want to be kept;
You can never move forward if something is holding you back.


© Copyright 2008 Rachelle Sparks - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2008-03-06 08:41 AM


Rachelle, this is very wise advice here! I love it!

just what I needed for my day today!

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2 posted 2008-03-06 09:02 AM


Rachelle~

Your poster name leaves me wanting to head out for a heaping helping of Key Lime Sorbet~

I thoroughly enjoyed perusing your thoughts in this piece~

'Never carry your burdens for too long;
They become harder to let go.'


This so reminds me of a favorite saying of my Grandmother~
She said, "Don't try to carry your burdens alone."
"Give them up to the Lord-of-your knowing."

Welcome to this ever-growing circle of friends and poets~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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Earth Angel
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3 posted 2008-03-06 09:06 AM


A good reminder for all of us! My life road is strewn with those kind of boxes! I wish I had started casting them off when I was much younger! ~ but as they say, "Better late than never!"

A fine, insightful write!

Love your name! I mean I REALLY love your name! lol

Giving you a warm, welcoming pip hug

Earth Angel


KeyLimeSorbet
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4 posted 2008-03-06 09:07 AM


Haha, thank you, and yea i know, i'm such a sucker for sorbet!!!
Funny you talk about grandma's advice, cause the most prominent thing i recall about mine is that she always gave me ice cream to cheer me up :-)
Grandmas are the best!
Hope yall are having a GREAT day!

KeyLimeSorbet
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5 posted 2008-03-06 09:13 AM


Earth Angel- youre so right! it took me so long to get rid of some of them, but i never even stopped to think that hey, i did it!
Jezzika
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6 posted 2008-03-06 09:24 AM


hey girlie this poem was awesome!!!  I defintley could use this advice hahaha...let some things go lol....loved the poem
KeyLimeSorbet
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7 posted 2008-03-06 09:27 AM


Jezz- how is it that i can always depend on you ? lol, i loves ya chicka, and thanks a ton for the encouragement! :-)
KeyLimeSorbet
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8 posted 2008-03-06 09:29 AM


P.S- jezzika, shouldnt you be in school??
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9 posted 2008-03-06 09:40 AM


she is Chilli...till 10...

but not tomorrow! LOL

heck yeah...you gotta know when to stop carrying something that no longer belongs to you...for sure...sometimes you set it down in pieces, as you are able to let them go, or as you realize you don't "have" to hold onto it anymore. It's very liberating to come to that conclusion that you just don't need to, and maybe, you never did.

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10 posted 2008-03-06 11:26 AM


Good poem, wise advice.
                 Ida

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11 posted 2008-03-06 01:42 PM


If you go forward to the future
Carrying the baggage from the past
Then tomorrows dreams
Like yesterdays schemes
Are destined not too last....

ThisDiamond
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12 posted 2008-03-06 03:36 PM


Welcome to Passions.
Your thoughts are well rendered.
Look forward to more of your posts.
TD

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13 posted 2008-03-06 03:37 PM


Enjoyed =D
graeshine2006
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14 posted 2008-07-07 09:36 PM


My mom made me come here and read this because it was so fitting for me.  

GREAT STUFF!

KeyLimeSorbet
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15 posted 2008-07-08 04:10 PM


Aw, thank you, i like that a lot of people can realte to this one because everyone has their own little things :-)
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16 posted 2008-07-09 04:49 PM


Oh-My-Gumbo. Good grief. Brains, wisdom and insight rolled into one. And it's seriously doubtful that the very people who need to heed this sort of sage nugget will ever listen, lol! Almost worth crying about.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·

KeyLimeSorbet
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17 posted 2008-07-10 04:20 PM


you crack me up lol
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