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KeyLimeSorbet
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0 posted 2008-03-05 07:40 PM



I've read every book from cover to cover,
but I'm left with the binding, begging for a glance.
These words will make vain, they only show the best of you.
It's a fault of mine, I see you through my heart and the blood turns my eyes to rose.
You could never do anything wrong. You're the perfect prince to your fairy tale, with the perfect happily ever after, but I'm just the pebble on the path.


© Copyright 2008 Rachelle Sparks - All Rights Reserved
LadyTom
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1 posted 2008-03-05 07:43 PM


Very good!!! Enjoyed.
A warm welcome to this wonderful blue land!!!

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2 posted 2008-03-05 07:46 PM


Whoa Chilli!



way cool! Glad to see you found your way to the blue pages, I want you to post more, k?
Welcome to Pip!
love ya,

me

Jezzika
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3 posted 2008-03-05 07:46 PM


Girl!! this was awesome!! I loved it The ending was my favorite...it sucks to feel this way tho LOVE YOU
ThisDiamond
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4 posted 2008-03-05 08:14 PM


Welcome to Passions.
Wonderful entrance post!
TD

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5 posted 2008-03-05 08:38 PM


I know well the sensation of rose colored glasses...
and you wrote of your own experience very well.

Welcome to Passions in Poetry!
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6 posted 2008-03-05 08:48 PM


wow that's awesome!
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7 posted 2008-03-05 09:12 PM


WELCOME TO PIP!!

     

ARCTIC WIND

Nan
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8 posted 2008-03-05 10:05 PM


A lovely entree... Welcome to our Passionate Poetic World...


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9 posted 2008-03-05 10:13 PM


just a pebble on the path....what an amazing way to express your thought. I like it!
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10 posted 2008-03-05 11:33 PM


I am liking this a lot.

Welcome.

Alison

KeyLimeSorbet
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11 posted 2008-03-06 09:02 AM


Thank yall so much, i'm glad that it was enoyed! :-)
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12 posted 2008-03-06 09:38 AM


Rachelle~

I like the pebbles thought a lt~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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KeyLimeSorbet
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13 posted 2008-03-06 09:45 AM


marge- thank you, when i originally wrote the poem it had a different ending, but i changed it to the pebble thingy, so i'm very glad you liked it! :-)
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14 posted 2008-03-06 11:39 AM


I like your writing, Rachelle. Welcome to PIP.
                                   Ida

jwesley
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15 posted 2008-03-06 12:40 PM


Really like it all...but truly loved the way it ended and "...but I'm just the pebble on the path."

Perfect

jimmy


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16 posted 2008-03-06 12:47 PM


Kind of sad.  You remind me of my self lol

-Juju

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Who thinks really deep thougts
What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos

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