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Margherita
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0 posted 2008-03-05 07:23 AM






Early morning yearnings


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Solitude

One pair of black socks
hang in mocking rain and wind
yearning for sun's touch


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Environment

Seagulls and black crows
walk across town streets in rain
craving fish and corn


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Misery

Rain soaked cartons
absorb salty tears and sighs
clochard craves shelter


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Spring turbulence

Cherry tree blossoms
Targets of rowdy raindrops
Yearn for painter's brush


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simon
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1 posted 2008-03-05 08:49 AM


wow! Margherita, loved these...
poddarku
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2 posted 2008-03-05 08:58 AM


dearet, you are the God of trivial which you have made a creation of your own. your insight has highlightened the God's world. i like the first one best.

clever talks delay friendship!

LeeJ
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3 posted 2008-03-05 09:05 AM


ahhh, how serenely beautiful....thank you
passing shadows
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4 posted 2008-03-05 09:08 AM


how I wish I could see the world through your eyes

beautiful piece

Robert E. Jordan
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5 posted 2008-03-05 09:20 AM


Margherita,

These are pretty good.  Your use of the French word "clochard" was worth the price of admission.  Indeed they do.

Bobby

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6 posted 2008-03-05 09:23 AM


You have captured the heart of the raindrop...to blugeon, to dismay...so as to wet the thirsty depths of each display.
Smiling at your visions

Earth Angel
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7 posted 2008-03-05 10:12 AM


Maga Margherita ~

Your "early morning yearnings" made for a very vivid reading experience!

The way you displayed these haiku, was very effective in creating a pause between the various scenes and moods.

Bravissima, Angel Delight!

With love and Light,

Linda

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8 posted 2008-03-05 12:40 PM


I enjoyed these, Margharita.
                      Ida

LadyTom
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9 posted 2008-03-05 12:49 PM


good and very lovely. Dear Lady. the Angel Delight!!!
Margherita
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10 posted 2008-03-05 12:58 PM


Thank you all my dear pip friends!

This morning while driving through the town my eyes caught these views  and I told myself "remember socks, seagulls/crows, clochard and cherry tree" and the impressions will unfold again in the mind's eyes, when you can jot them down. And this is the result. I could have developed many more themes ... today I SAW things and they whispered to me.

Love,
Margherita

It is still raining.


effjayel
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11 posted 2008-03-05 02:54 PM


quote:
today I SAW things and they whispered to me.


  You really should mix Aqua with the Vino, you will be seeing Dolphins in the Trevi fountain next...BTW, nice Haiku, my favorite one was all of them....

J  x

Margherita
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12 posted 2008-03-05 06:15 PM


Thank you John!
There are so many things I can see here ... with human heart and dolphin's sixth sense!!
love
Margherita

LindsayP
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13 posted 2008-03-05 09:24 PM



Great Haikus Margherita

much enjoyed.

Lindsay

Huan Yi
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14 posted 2008-03-05 09:33 PM


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"Seagulls and black crows
walk across town streets in rain
craving fish and corn"
This is good

John

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Margherita
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15 posted 2008-03-06 04:39 PM


Thank you dear Lindsay, I enjoyed your visit to my rainy morning impressions!

Thank you dear John! A premiere!

Love.
Margherita

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16 posted 2008-03-07 08:08 AM


oh, i like the image of the black socks...

and i like seeing you again...thank you for the warm wonderful welcome...its so lovely to be remembered xxxxx and you are one of the lovliest people to be remembered by

Margherita
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17 posted 2008-03-07 10:16 AM


Dear Dawn, thank you so much for looking in here and for your loving comment.
I did miss you very much! I hope you will stay or at least visit more often.
And above all I am looking forward to one of your precious poems!
Love and hugs.
Margherita

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