navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #42 » I know
Open Poetry #42
Post A Reply Post New Topic I know Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa

0 posted 2008-03-05 02:59 AM


Who I was and who I am
is not who I will be
when attuned is the mind
into a future view
but views are like the mist
hanging low and thick
and turning every day
into the deepest fog.

The thought to be as one
who clears the air for love
springs hopeful in the breast
each day I think of you
but thoughts are like the sun
coming out and going in
in accordance with the times.

But the dreams of today
speak to me, you know,
and though I work the same
as I’ve always done before
the machinery of heart
has been updated new.

I hear the whirr and hum;
could this indeed be love
that can see through the fog
and affix the thoughts of you
stable and undone
by the turn of time?

In this view I see you new
standing ready to begin
the journey to love’s final end
that cannot ever be ~
and I smile my welcome now
for you to know I know
the sun stays out long enough
to clear the deepest fog!

Helen / 5 March 2008


© Copyright 2008 Helen - All Rights Reserved
Alison
Deputy Moderator 5 ToursDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 TourDeputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!
1 posted 2008-03-05 03:13 AM


Helen,

I feel hope for new beginnings - am I close?  Beautiful.

Alison

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
2 posted 2008-03-05 03:33 AM


Dear Alison, You are close but it's like I have to think a new beginning before it can be so I'm thinking, thinking, and writing - thought, word, and then will the deed be?  Only time can tell.

Thanks so much for reading.

Hugs
Helen

LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

3 posted 2008-03-05 07:06 AM


I myself, am starting a new beginning, therefore, this was the perfect read and hit very close to home, embracing, soothing and in great anticipation...lovely my friend, simply lovely writing.

hugs
Lee J.

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
4 posted 2008-03-05 07:15 AM


I agree with LeeJ, this was a beautiful  piece of  writing, Helen even if it is just "thinking" for now.


M

Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
5 posted 2008-03-05 07:58 AM


quote:
In this view I see you new
standing ready to begin
the journey to love’s final end
that cannot ever be ~
and I smile my welcome now
for you to know I know
the sun stays out long enough
to clear the deepest fog!



Wonderful conclusion of a deeply and captivatingly thought through write.

Always admiring your ability of bringing emotions on to the paper that have wringed through the mind to land upon the heart.

Love and hugs, dear Helen.

Margherita

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
6 posted 2008-03-05 08:34 AM


Oh damn, the tears are appearing at your lovely comments.  That's it, that's all, until they disappear. Thanks so much!
ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
7 posted 2008-03-06 06:51 PM


Let the season come,
With whispers and soothing sounds.
Hugs Gal,
nice write!

LindsayP
Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410
Australia, Victoria
8 posted 2008-03-06 07:06 PM



You put a lot of thought into this one Helen

A great write.

Lindsay

Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354
Listening to every heart
9 posted 2008-03-06 07:14 PM


I'm so glad your both thinking and writing, Helen. My muse took the route South, I believe, and isn't coming back until there's no further chance of snow! And that may be awhile yet, the way the winter's been going!

So, I'm getting my substance from those whose muses haven't rocketed off elsewhere...

it's good just to read!


PurplePenButterfly
Member
since 2008-03-06
Posts 65
Canada
10 posted 2008-03-07 10:42 AM


I enjoyed your poem, deep in thought but conveys for me, inspiration and one can conquer anytbhing, just have to be postive and journey onwards.
Post A Reply Post New Topic ⇧ top of page ⇧ Go to Previous / Newer Topic Back to Topic List Go to Next / Older Topic
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.
navwin » Archives » Open Poetry #42 » I know

Passions in Poetry | pipTalk Home Page | Main Poetry Forums | 100 Best Poems

How to Join | Member's Area / Help | Private Library | Search | Contact Us | Login
Discussion | Tech Talk | Archives | Sanctuary