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Rambling Thoughts to Nowhere
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Rambling Thoughts to Nowhere |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! 
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Sometimes my writing doesn’t fit my skin Usually when I am tired I push at the box and break down the sides and I hate the poetry that spills forth Because, I still see the sea when I close my eyes I hear the surf pounding rocks that loom from the fog and I am homesick for the cry of the eagles catching the drift of the wind It’s times like these melancholy nights when tears thicken in my throat and my eyes burn It’s times like these that I long to smell the rain in alder patches thick and raspberry bushes scented And, I miss the light touch of mist on my face I am homesick for the inlet and my mountains cutting into blue skies with crisp white peaks I hear the Magpies torturing the cat, the dog, me It doesn’t matter to them - it’s all a good laugh at my expense If I open my ears, I can hear the wind whispering in the Children’s Grove and the Sanctuary (I didn’t know that everyone did not name their woods) The moss is soft under bare feet like cushions of over-stuffed pillows on Grandma’s couch And, I know that the dewberries will sweeten my tongue The Fiddle Ferns will open in another week or so and you can’t grow Morning Glories in the summer Can you tell that I am homesick? I don’t want to write poems about angst and anger I don’t want to break down the walls of my box I like walls and safety nets and memories of old doll houses passed down from child to child, and homemade rag dolls I smile over the thought of egg box tea sets And this summer, I will have a picnic in the tall grass with a jar of ice cold chocolate milk and a peanut butter sandwich But, right now – I am homesick and it hurts to swallow --- Alison |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Oh my but I felt the sorrow and pain in this piece. I think I would have to feel the same were I ever to give up my sea and mountains for any length of time. Sometimes the writing out of the "lumps in our throats" is the only way to survive. Nicely done. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms ali-san...home is where the heart is...always...enjoyed this |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Alison home is just a state of mind or mindlessness, depending. But your poem makes me feel your thoughts. Good poetry doll....very good poetry. Hugs. |
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xTr3m3sT Member
since 2008-03-03
Posts 415 |
Wow, Very powerful poem! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
This bought tears to my eyes, not because it was sad...but because of the powerful emotions it not only delivers, but evokes...you have penned well my friend...outstanding...felt those bittersweet memories, as I love nature's waters and her noises as well...hugs and love Lee J. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"I don’t want to write poems about angst and anger I don’t want to break down the walls of my box I like walls and safety nets and memories of old doll houses passed down from child to child, and homemade rag dolls I smile over the thought of egg box tea sets And this summer, I will have a picnic in the tall grass with a jar of ice cold chocolate milk and a peanut butter sandwich.."... me, too Alison. your past sounds like a lovely place to have lived. M |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
yes. just like this.  this knows me too well... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
it's good to be homesick now and then...to think about where you came from thoughts here are wonderful |
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simon Member
since 2008-01-14
Posts 440London, England |
Alison, I think this touches everyone, everyone has their own peanut butter sandwich.... |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Very Much Enjoyed! ARCTIC WIND |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Alison, my dear sweet Alison, I love your poetry ~ and you. I am so moved by your words and sentiments ~ and talent ~ that I must deem this heart spill, a  You expressed your longing, so exquisitely well! ...There, now it's SAVED, lest I forget!  Loving, emotionally-healing, hugs, Linda  |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Alison, you do speak in strong emotions to me too with those white mountain peaks! What you say about the dolls made me think of mine, which I gave away to a lady who had taken care of my mother and who was crazy about it. When I told my daughter that I had given away that doll, she almost could not tolerate it and she had difficulty in forgiving me. I am not attached to things generally. The memory though is very vivid and there in my mind and heart they remain intact. Beautiful, intense write! Love and hugs. Margherita  |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
A This place you describe Is disguised very thinly Look deep in to my eyes Are we talking Mount McKinley...? J |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Alison, Nice work Hon. Don't be homesick. Remember--home is where the hat is. Bobby |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Mysteria, You understand. Alison |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
D Sometimes my heart moves forward - sometimes it just hangs out here. And, sometimes it just wants to go back to where it used to be. It does miss the water. A |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Donna, Thank you. I think my fingers were sad - I just let them write what they wanted. xoxoxo Alison |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
xTr3m3sT What a clever name! Thank you for stopping in and sharing your thoughts. And, welcome to PiP. Alison |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Lee, Did I mention that I have missed you? Yep, I think I did. Thank you for the beautiful words and for looking through my window. Alison |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
M, It was, and is, very beautiful. Remember that poem you wrote and you had all the pictures of your gardens? It reminded me of there. Just the feeling I got from reading what you wrote and seeing through your eyes. A |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
SEA xoxoxoxo A |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Dixie That makes so much sense to me. Maybe our minds know when it is time to go back for a bit? Alison |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
simon What a wonderful way to express it. I am packing up a hamper this summer - just of pb sandwiches and we all can have a picnic. Alison |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
AW Thank you - you always make me smile Alison |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Linda, Your hugs are always very healing. I think that is one reason you are an Earth Angel. Love and hugs back at you. xoxxo Alison |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Margherita, What a poignant story. I hope that your daughter has forgiven you. My family is mixed - most don't care about our 'treasures' - but I am the keeper of the memories and many of the 'trinkets' of our past. Love, Alison |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
John Your sight has to travel further south down to the Cook Inlet and the river's mouth Strolling on beaches strewn with kelp and sand Looking at mountains and glaciers formed before time began. A   |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
James Thank you, my friend. Alison |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Bobby, Yes, so true. Thank you. Hugs, Alison |
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Fareed Member
since 2008-02-08
Posts 75 |
Your conversation with yourself must be like a lovechild of confessions and aesthetic aspirations. Its beautiful. |
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Misty Lilacs Senior Member
since 2005-11-15
Posts 1060White Birch Forest |
This poem brought tears and flooded me with memories of my childhood. Both my parents are gone and there doesn't seem to be a home to miss anymore. I have lived in several homes since and my most of my heart is where my home is; however there is a sliver that wishes I had a place to make me feel homesick. I loved this and most of all I love all your poetry. To me, you are a 'real' poet. hugs, Marti |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
A, Somewhere in the attic, I have a picture of me taken at Cook inlet. When I came home, my mother had it framed and hung over the mantlepiece...I always used to think that she either loved the scenery or was proud of me...I later found out that it was to keep my kid sis away from the fire....John  [This message has been edited by effjayel (03-06-2008 04:53 PM).] |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
I agree with the others my sweet Ali-girl... home is where your heart is.. you can still carry your lovely memories with you wherever you go.. enjoyed these very beautiful rambling thoughts from your heart... love RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Fareed, Thank you for the beautiful words. Alison |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Marti, I am sending hugs. I understand and I thank you for the beautiful comment about my writing. You brought tears to my eyes. xoxoxo Alison |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Thank you, beautiful vandana. xoxoxo A |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
John, You are talking about my favorite place on earth now. Glad you see what I do. A |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
RDB, You are a delight, so loving and caring. Thank you for caring about me. Thank you, also, for reading and commenting to my poetry. You mean a great deal to me. xoxoxo Ali |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
a fine ‘penning!’… I am particularly fond of: “ I still see the sea when I close my eyes I hear the surf pounding rocks that loom from the fog and I am homesick for the cry of the eagles catching the drift of the wind”; “I long to smell the rain in alder patches thick and raspberry bushes scented”; “mountains cutting into blue skies with crisp white peaks”; And especially: “I don’t want to write poems about angst and anger I don’t want to break down the walls of my box” [There is quite enough self-psychoanalysis wearing masks of ‘poetry!’] much sustained applause for this v. effective and personal write! |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Bruce, You are a wonderful part of my today. Thank you, my friend. Alison |
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matronmedusa Member
since 2008-03-08
Posts 89Alabama, USA |
Absolutely beautiful. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
matronmedusa, Thank you. I am thrilled that my poem touched you as you begin your PiP experience. This is a wonderful place to share thoughts and creative writing. Welcome. Thank you again, Alison |
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matronmedusa Member
since 2008-03-08
Posts 89Alabama, USA |
This really moved me... You have a beautiful way with words. |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Wonderful write, Alison. I don't actually have a home to be homesick over but I do want to "go back" - back to my youth perhaps or just to somewhere before what is now. Helen |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
matronmedusa, Thank you again. I am reading your poetry and really thinking about it .. and your writing in the prose section ... well, I will be writing my thoughts to that also. Welcome and thank you. Alison |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Helen, I am not sure I can go back either. Things change. It's forever my home though. Thank you for reading and offering your thoughts. xoxoxo Alison |
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