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Martie
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0 posted 2008-03-02 06:54 PM


Gone now,
her quick, clean lines
and tilting globe of determined sky.

She hung her skirt out wantonly
on the naked open neighborhood,
dark with clouds and pink with dawn,
I listened as her tongue licked trees.

No need for solace in her rain,
my weeping chalice is gone,  
where winter skies and dappled roads
flush the aching river in me
to the sea.

A tree was made so love could stay  
and blossoms gamely on that day
with pink peach petals weeping down
where tears have not an opening found.

February is gone now,
with her quick, clean lines
and tilting globe of determined sky.

I have fondly said goodbye.
-----------------
In loving memory of Michelle.  



[This message has been edited by Martie (03-02-2008 07:35 PM).]

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1 posted 2008-03-02 07:12 PM


oh, but you do have a way with words....

Hi dear one, hope you and Taylor are well.

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2 posted 2008-03-02 07:19 PM


fine 'write!'

I am especially fond of:

"February is gone now,
with her quick, clean lines
and tilting globe of determined sky."

applause!

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3 posted 2008-03-02 08:36 PM



Lovely verse Martie, a pleasure to read.

A big warm hug to you dear lady.

Lindsay

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4 posted 2008-03-02 08:54 PM


But you allow all of her lessons to stay, love.
As it should be, and always will be,
from the top of the mountain
to the shore.




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5 posted 2008-03-02 08:56 PM


I will be glad when I can say goodbye to March

this year is going by so fast yes

beautiful tribute poem Martie

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6 posted 2008-03-02 09:32 PM


Very lovely, dear Martie.
You make my heart smile.

Alison

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7 posted 2008-03-02 11:53 PM


Martie - all your poems are wonderful but when in memory of one gone they are outstanding especially in terms of the emotion you impart to the reader.  It's like we too must say a fond goodbbye until February shows us again the love you have inside.


Helen

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8 posted 2008-03-03 05:10 AM


Fine writing given in tenderness...James
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9 posted 2008-03-03 07:58 AM


MartieSis~
How beautiful you are~

Love and lots of *Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
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10 posted 2008-03-03 08:51 AM


Martie, Hello...so wonderful to see you and read you...

this was an exceptionally beautiful tribute...nature so helps us understand things...

your an artist of visuals....

Love
Lee J.

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11 posted 2008-03-03 10:19 AM


A tree was made so love could stay  
and blossoms gamely on that day
with pink peach petals weeping down
where tears have not an opening found.


Dear Martie, it's always an event to read your poems. And this one stirs deep emotion within my heart, for the beauty of the words and the beauty of you.

Love and hugs.
Margherita

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12 posted 2008-03-03 10:39 AM


..."A tree was made so love could stay"...

There is always such a tender touch to your works Martie.  The healing you speak of here, I can understand... Spring comes.

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13 posted 2008-03-03 10:46 AM


Beautiful song softly sang memory.
enjoyed

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14 posted 2008-03-03 11:47 AM


good read
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15 posted 2008-03-03 05:55 PM


Lovely tribute Martie, you have such wonderful heart.
                             Ida

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16 posted 2008-03-03 11:33 PM


It takes some people years to be sensitive to nature, you were just born that way, and wear it well.  This was beautiful Martie, but wish I could read it, and then, turn the page to the next.

Carpe' Diem


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17 posted 2008-03-04 09:42 AM


Very well done.



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