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simon
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since 2008-01-14
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London, England

0 posted 2008-02-27 10:15 AM


'Father, Mother, I'm six years old now
And I've been giving a great deal of thought
To my development and the things I should be taught. I've come to the conclusion that,
I need some guidance, in my work and in my play, a role-model,
Someone to help me on my way.
I don't mean to dis' my sis', but she's a girl and
She twirls around in a quite different World to mine,
She's no help when I say 'Emma, I have a dilemma,'
It's a bigger brother that I need
A bigger brother that I pine.'

And Mother said, 'I'm sorry Simon, but there's no way that can be done.
Whatever the future holds for us, you'll always be the eldest son.'

So I cried and a tantrum I threw ('cause when you're six and no-one listens to you, what else are you supposed to do?)

'Cause I couldn't cope with all the pressure of
Being the eldest son,
'All the other families have letters addressed to messers!
All the other mothers have bigger brothers for their sons!'

And that was it. My bigger brother never came. and whilst I adored and continue to adore my sister, it was never quite the same.

© Copyright 2008 Simon parr - All Rights Reserved
LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

1 posted 2008-02-27 10:34 AM


smiling here....the dilemas of a child, you have expressed so acurately....

well done....
very much enjoyed this

while reading this, I couldn't help but think of one of my favorite movies...Simon Birch...


Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
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Realms of Light
2 posted 2008-02-27 11:04 AM


simon, I had similar thoughts when I was a child! You just brought it all back to me! ~ Actually, I have even had similar thoughts as an adult!

I am the oldest of three and most of the responsibilities ~ and the work! ~ fell on my shoulders. I also carried more of the worries ~ but that was of my own doing. I tend to be a bit of a mother hen ~ and worry wort! I felt a bit envious of my girlfriends who had older, protective brothers. I was my brother's protector while we were growing up. Mind you, he's now 6'4" and can take care of himself! lol

I loved how you wrote this! It was amusing and at the same time it tugged at my heartstrings.

Loving hug,
Linda


Robert E. Jordan
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since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
3 posted 2008-02-27 12:01 PM


Simon,

Complain, complain.  Isn’t that the way it is.

You’re lucky, you’re the boss, and you can push the others around.

Great poem--I got a kick out of it.

Bobby


Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia
4 posted 2008-02-28 05:47 AM


liked this Simon, but of course can't relate as I'm the youngest girl and the middle child... I'm spoilt to a tee!    smiles ever so sweetly at you though...   love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
5 posted 2008-02-28 10:50 AM


You were quite philosphically oriented at six, dear Simon.
Enjoyed your reflections and the good mood trickling through.
love
Margherita

effjayel
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since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474
At the Crossroads of Infinity
6 posted 2008-02-29 12:30 PM



Ok Simon, I can do the big brother thing, now you need to draw up a list of all your favourite toys & I get first pick....

John

TomMark
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since 2007-07-27
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7 posted 2008-02-29 02:00 PM


Lovely. And fun to read.
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