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divine chaos
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0 posted 2008-02-27 05:10 AM



to speak the words, civilly,
that are fettered in my heart,
eating away at the soul of me,
has never been easy -
the recessive redheaded gene
in the brunette girl
evident only in a temper
that flashes in emerald eyes and
morphs the sophisticated tongue
into a wicked blade that
cuts to the quick
swiftly
and without remorse
.. until it's too late

so I write

ripping the pages with a furious pen
ink mingling with tears
upon tattered paper, mirroring
the shattered soul
that bleeds
with every jagged line
etched upon it.

© Copyright 2008 Sheli Carmichael - All Rights Reserved
Marchmadness
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1 posted 2008-02-27 05:38 AM


Good writing, Divine Chaos. Tell it like it is.
                                   Ida

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2 posted 2008-03-01 10:07 PM


Sheli,

You and I are so alike in this way.  Keep writing, my friend.  It's a way to let out the emotion.  

But know this forever - some people just are not worth us.  You are far above the one you write about .. okay, he's an ass.  One big fat ass.  No, he is a thick lipped, snub nosed, beady eyed ass.  Yeah.  No, he's a gonna be bald, and impotent and have terrible gas ass.  Yeah.  That's it.  And he's an idiot

Did I mention that he is an idiot?  What a stupid butt headed Idiot Ass.  That's him.

I feel better.  How about you?

I love you.
Ali

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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3 posted 2008-03-01 10:29 PM


LOL @ my Ali-girl's great response!  I agree with her 100%!!  lovely writing here Sheli...get him out of your system and move on my lovely friend.. so many more fishes in the sea...   love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

divine chaos
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4 posted 2008-03-01 10:33 PM


you two are wonderful *grins*  I almost hate to tell you that it wasn't him I was writing about, after Ali's awesome response *grins*  thank you lovies

Sheli

By words the mind is winged
~Aristophanes~

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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5 posted 2008-03-01 10:39 PM


ah well.... fine writing though! and very eloquent words from Ali-girl too!  LOL!  love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

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6 posted 2008-03-01 10:39 PM


Well, he IS.

I didn't say that you were talking about HIM.  I was talking about HIM though .. and did I mention that he is an Idiotic Ass?

I bet that he wishes that his male extremity was as long as his nose.  Yeah.  I just bet!

He is a Dweeb.  He is stupid.  AND (sputters) He has no idea what he is doing.  He would not know wonderful if it fell on his lap (you didn't fall on his lap, did you???).  Well, even if you did - he was too stupid to know.

Do you know that they make pointy hats just for him.  No, NOT wizard hats .. dunce  hats.

He is a moron.  He is not worth the words I write ( but damn, it does feel good to write them) .. and he is a jerk.

Yep,

I love you.
Ali

PS .. Who ARE you writing about?  

(grins and wanders out)

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7 posted 2008-03-03 08:32 AM


you are just beautiful

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8 posted 2008-03-03 10:47 AM


I agree, Dixie.
She is.

divine chaos
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9 posted 2008-03-04 01:38 AM


Thanks for dropping by, Dixie,
and for your sweet reply
You're beautiful too, ya know  


Ali .. *grins*  I love you.
Yep, I do  

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Honeybunch
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11 posted 2008-03-04 02:43 PM


I certainly enjoyed your most expressive write and the replies made my night!  I know a HIM like HIM!  
LadyTom
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12 posted 2008-03-04 02:46 PM


very good. felt the strong emotion.
enjoyed.

divine chaos
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13 posted 2008-03-05 03:15 PM


Honeybunch, the replies made my night too!  I almost wished I HAD been writing about HIM *grins*  thanks for the read glad you enjoyed

Sheli

divine chaos
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14 posted 2008-03-05 03:16 PM


LadyTom, thanks for the read .. so glad you enjoyed   

Sheli

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