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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296
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the sky is large, well connected prolific floridity of communication emotional impact of waiting investing what mainstreams potential you could never see that budding in the icy veins of winter no longer wearing those low cut gowns didn't need to prove I held 2 aces i still see the sky line in my dreams greyhounds of heaven getting fuller more significant but you would never understand switching conversations to rapturous excursions yours... you never kept me safe and warm not even close it was a line you strung like Christmas lights over and over there is a sea chest of prophetic matter big time clients making death packs rising to the next plain of existence attempting mental self preservation rather then a fatal attraction of complicated relationships, quirky characters, and wry humor laughing Unexpected turns became worse, With your arms around me Showing me 85 ways to die Alone… my sky is large…i'm in kansas clicking my heals three times there are no trap doors or shadows in the morning don't need to feed any egos or silent cries….or out of pocket expenses impending unlikely looming the day you backed into my car remember? don't call me when you need a place to stay I'm not that 1-800-BABE you always did fail to see, what was right under your eyes I wrote for you, at one time, but then it became a love affair with god…his 7 keys to success there is no price for freedom the unknown is a beautiful mind high stepping suspense, deep spiritual codes a full circle like a precognitive stock market of light, voice, and song my midsummer dreams do you hear me?...mine... nomadic ways becomes me... I'm no longer hungry for lies |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow...so many great lines in here.... loved this!  "no longer wearing those low cut gowns didn't need to prove I held 2 aces" "you never kept me safe and warm not even close" "my midsummer dreams do you hear me...mine... nomadic ways becomes me...I'm no longer hungry for lies" |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...James |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
LeeJ, you do know how to capture the reader's attention! Girl you are bliss! love Margherita |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Beautifully Penned ARCTIC WIND |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"you never kept me safe and warm not even close it was a line you strung like Christmas lights over and over" Oh LeeJ, this whole piece is a heartache ballad. Lines such as those highlighted above are powerfully emotive.  Peaceful thoughts for you, friend. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
LeeJ... beautiful.. love RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Lee, I am always so much in awe of your talent and the richness of your poetry, that I often find it difficult to pen a reply that adequately expresses that awe! Lines such as ~ "you could never see that budding in the icy veins of winter" ~ are so uniquely creative and expressive. Your closing words had great impact and I felt them to my core ~ "I'm no longer hungry for lies" ~ and neither am I. Big, warm, loving, compassionate hug-o-love, Linda  |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Lee J., I haven't been around here very much lately, but when I've stopped by, I've checked to see if you have posted. I had been wondering where you were and had hoped you'd post again... It's good to read your writing again. Your unique imagery and great lines have always been something I've always looked forward to... "my midsummer dreams do you hear me?...mine... nomadic ways becomes me... I'm no longer hungry for lies" Very powerful! Well said! hugs, miscellanea |
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shirtless Member
since 2006-04-29
Posts 359 |
This is a good poem whether one analyses it or just feels it. Thanks for posting it. regards, shirtless poetry podcasts, blogs and[ photopoems at URL= http://anthonyarmstrong.ca |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 HEY Leeso good to read you again! I could pick out so many lines in this that I really liked definite keeper! |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
LeeJ, This works well as a stream of consciousness poem. I like it. Bobby |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
Dear Lee, I just loved this my friend, so very well expressed, made me relate when being honest to myself, life is a lonely place at times, the mind is our haven and hope our friend. Have a great day. Rick |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Lee J you are exquisitely exceptional! OH, and your poetry is too!! BIG HUG!! JL |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Wow! This is very well written. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Lee, This is so beautiful. I just feel it as I read and as I get caught up in each line. I am so glad that I stopped and now can save this. It is among the best that I have read. Alison |
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