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Fareed
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0 posted 2008-02-26 07:28 AM


The highland girl who died in her blossom – on the fourth day of August.
Here rests but a merry lass,
Hushed, once days did pass,
Whose laughter led veteran tear,
Aforesaid damsel sleeps here.

O’er Alps, under sugarberry,
Wailed by this forlorn prairie,
Certain, for her being blest,
Foremost angels shall manifest.

Lived under virtues so many,
The comeliest belle than any,
Alas, what fate had to bring,
For who lacked the seraphic ring.

What Nordic maid left above,
Torn asunder tales of calf love,
Brace of sapphires, in truth,
Eyed by many unheard-of youth.

O’ high winds, why ye repine?
When ‘tis low among alpines,
Yon, whence the bells didn’t toll,
Ye, not the sorriest of them all.

Eventide dies, I yet inscribe,
Unforeseen role, sans my bagpipe,
Words, grim to engrave in rain,
As I shroud my tone, in vain.

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Margherita
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1 posted 2008-02-26 04:24 PM


Beautiful romantic epitaph, the melancholic tune permeates your words, love the rhythm you created.

love
Margherita  

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2 posted 2008-02-26 04:51 PM


Such an old world feel...a poem from centuries back...

it felt good to wear this one, Fareed.

Thank you.


Fareed
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3 posted 2008-02-27 03:04 AM


Thank you so much for liking it, Margherita and Sunshine. The ancient look indeed is my thing. I'm glad to have made you enjoy it
Fareed
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4 posted 2008-02-29 07:24 AM


And of course it was Alexander Pope inspired piece.
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5 posted 2008-02-29 04:43 PM


Fareed this was very good, I have read Pope but prefer Alfred Lord Tennyson, especially
'The Lady of Shallot' I am sure you must have read it, if not I'm sure you would enjoy his work it is very accessible....John


.There she weaves by night and day
A magic web with colours gay.
She has heard a whisper say,
A curse is on her if she stay
To look down to Camelot.
She knows not what the curse may be,
And so she weaveth steadily,
And little other care hath she,
The Lady of Shalott.

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6 posted 2008-02-29 05:57 PM


Beautifully penned

ARCTIC WIND

LadyTom
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7 posted 2008-02-29 07:20 PM


very classical. enjoyed the read. You write fine  poems.
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8 posted 2008-03-02 12:51 PM


Fareed,

Most beautiful.

Alison

Fareed
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9 posted 2008-03-04 12:53 PM


Thank you so much for your words. It is really appreciated to receive such.

Alfred Lord Tennyson is immense but I was actually inspired by the epitaphs of Pope to write this one, but of course it follows the different path altogether.

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