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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2008-02-24 07:41 AM


there is gravel on the glass there
at the curve of the lover's highway
where slipping off and slipping in
seems natural enough for dreamers

the bank is slow and easy down
letting you drift into a dead end
with the soft mouth whispering
of lovely like mud on your shoes

and you don't even want to swim
just submerge into the warm willing
until the slippery sides of falling
feel like silk on grasping fingers

funny how we never climb back out
once we seem to succeed at the drowning
and coming up for air would be chilly
on the edges of our wet ended skin

so we just listen to the warm

____________

daark



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Falling rain
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1 posted 2008-02-24 07:45 AM


nice poem but your picture sort of creeps me out lol. good poem   

~Zach~  



Artic Wind
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2 posted 2008-02-24 09:44 AM


Dark, Good Morning- I just finished reading your very descriptive poem this early morning. And noticed that this is a very cool write.

Very chilling and quiet Write..

ARCTIC WIND

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2008-02-24 09:47 AM


Friend rain..thanks for the read and comment..and am pleased that the photo bothers you too.

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a & w, thank you for looking into this one

Gentle Spirit
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4 posted 2008-02-24 10:13 AM


sometimes just listening is all that one needs to do D.  Nicely done.
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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5 posted 2008-02-24 06:17 PM


so we just listen to the warm

mmmm... lovely... love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Margherita
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6 posted 2008-02-24 06:33 PM


quote:
and you don't even want to swim
just submerge into the warm willing
until the slippery sides of falling
feel like silk on grasping fingers



How nice! You gifted us with a Sunday "bis" today!

love
Margherita

Sunshine
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7 posted 2008-02-24 11:05 PM


quote:
and you don't even want to swim
just submerge into the warm willing
until the slippery sides of falling
feel like silk on grasping fingers

You've caught the very feel
of my real
when I read McKuen...

thank you so much, DS.
You're a gift, unwrapping.


Alison
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8 posted 2008-02-25 12:30 PM


D

This is hypnotic.

A

RCat
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9 posted 2008-02-25 12:41 PM


Excellent...


Dark Stranger
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10 posted 2008-02-25 06:14 AM


ms gs, thanks hon


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ms r & b, thank you for your eyes here


________________

ms mar, thank you lady friend


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ms sun, thank you for looking in on this one


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ms ali-san, thanks babe for the eyes


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friend Rcat, thank you

sighs are love songs

Indigo
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11 posted 2008-02-25 04:47 PM


the towel of your tongue,
warm word resuscitation
on wet ended skin.

Sounds like the water's more than fine...

Indigo

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12 posted 2008-02-25 05:35 PM


ms indi, step in, there is a place where it is fine and a bit stormy too, thanks babe
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