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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2008-02-21 07:17 PM


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The sun rises
And sets
The moon
Carries on

Wind and rain
Over rock and stone

Seasons change
Until the end
Of time

Slowly
A great silence
Is growing inside


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© Copyright 2008 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
Artic Wind
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1 posted 2008-02-21 07:19 PM


The sun rises
And sets
The moon
Carries on

Wind and rain
Over rock and stone...."

Lovely Describing Words!

ARCTIC WIND

Robert E. Jordan
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2 posted 2008-02-21 08:17 PM


Huan Yi,

This poem is nicely done.

Be careful of that "great silence".

Never be silent.  Rage on.

A little adagio can be nice at times however.

Bobby

Gentle Spirit
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3 posted 2008-02-21 08:18 PM


  Truly John, one of your finest pieces. I enjoy the brevity of your writes.  The sign of a true poet is when they can convey so very much with fewer words. Exremely well done, sir!
Marchmadness
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4 posted 2008-02-22 01:47 AM


This poem speaks volumes, John. Nicely done.
                             Ida

TomMark
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LA,CA
5 posted 2008-02-22 12:54 PM


oh, silence speaks more.
Pilgrimage
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since 2001-12-04
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Texas, USA
6 posted 2008-02-22 03:33 PM


Silence grows
like grass
through sidewalk cracks.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

secondhanddreampoet
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7 posted 2008-02-22 03:43 PM


fine 'write!'  [the ending in particular]
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