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Kristabell
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since 2003-11-29
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0 posted 2008-02-19 08:59 PM



Woes and worries of Every day,
String themselves out on lines that fray.

Thoughts and memories that speak the truth,
Is all that’s needed in existing proof.

The determination to battle the storm,
Comes from stepping outside the norm.

The will to work and be at play,
Stems from the heart, be that at is it may.


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LynnFromCT
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since 2008-02-18
Posts 53
CT, USA
1 posted 2008-02-19 09:01 PM


the words rhymed but the meter was off.  And I am not sure I like the way it ran. Maybe it;s just me... I will read more of your work.
passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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2 posted 2008-02-19 11:15 PM


cool write here

I liked it and it flowed fine to me

effjayel
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since 2007-09-30
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At the Crossroads of Infinity
3 posted 2008-02-20 05:12 AM


It worked for me Kristabell, Good job......

John

"Ignorance is the Enemy...."

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