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Open Poetry #42

A Brief Epiphany

RCat
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since 2008-02-16

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0 posted 2008-02-16 01:42 PM

“when someone’s got this [telescoping the moon] you’ll find a special
but when they have this [examining the craters] you bet or gather the chips
as they tumble between Hades and tomorrows pending ice age,
know what I...”

she, grabbing my question mark, bent it into an exclamation point
nibbled my bud and replied:

“suppose the whole whirl is just a mystic of [kiss me stupid]
your imagination?”

vagrant, wild, stunned, I previously unknown
expelled my mind as she come,pleated me
and folded me in lotus position

“wow,” lighting a marlboro, “you’re totally profound!”

[This message has been edited by RCat (02-16-2008 03:06 PM).]

RCat
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since 2008-02-16

Posts 70

1 posted 2008-02-16 03:00 PM

Sorry, I wasn't sure if the fill in the blank word was too aggressive.

Thanks for the gentle edit --- which I'd already planned upon revisiting this.

TomMark
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since 2007-07-27

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2 posted 2008-02-16 04:06 PM

Good poem.
Again welcome you to this wonderful site.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

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3 posted 2008-02-18 05:16 PM

Enjoyed reading this...James

Pilgrimage
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4 posted 2008-02-18 05:20 PM

"she come,pleated me" --- I love the sly way you use language.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Artic Wind
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5 posted 2008-02-18 06:47 PM

WELCOME TO PIP!

ARCTIC WIND

RCat
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since 2008-02-16

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6 posted 2008-02-19 12:31 PM

Thanks for the warm welcome...

I look forward to posting and reading more here.

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