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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2008-02-15 05:16 PM



it was always sunday there
next door to our windows
you were inside yours
I was outside mine
but our eyes touched

like the fingers of an echo
entering gloves the first time
slowly exploring the taste
of just knowing we both were
looking back through the invisible

I was surprised at your lips
when they spoke to me
just out of the blue words
like from a mona lisa fence
of white teeth with gated smile

and then you laughed girlish
without your woman hands on
almost fragile glass sided
and you said I was comfortable
which was better than love boots

so you could just tiptoe deeper


___________

daark

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JamesMichael
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1 posted 2008-02-15 05:32 PM


Like this...James
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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2 posted 2008-02-15 05:47 PM


so you could just tiptoe deeper

mmmm... yes I like the thought of this Mr Daark... love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2008-02-15 05:59 PM


Thanks james!!

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ms r & b, thank you for looking in ms

Kristabell
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4 posted 2008-02-15 06:56 PM


Well written.

K

Angel4aKing
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5 posted 2008-02-15 11:34 PM


kind of like tiptoeing daises, so long as they are not choking on the way down!!!! lol I really like this one thought provoking at the least!!! Cheers!!!!

~~~kingsangel~~~

Margherita
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6 posted 2008-02-16 06:49 AM


quote:
I was surprised at your lips
when they spoke to me
just out of the blue words
like from a mona lisa fence
of white teeth with gated smile

and then you laughed girlish
without your woman hands on
almost fragile glass sided
and you said I was comfortable
which was better than love boots

so you could just tiptoe deeper



Your every word has that secret, charming quality of tiptoeing under the skin ...
and linger within, dear D.!

love
Margherita


Dark Stranger
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7 posted 2008-02-16 06:53 AM


ms Krist' thanks lady friend.

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ms angel, thank you for the read and comments

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ms mar, thanks babe for the eyes and smile

TomMark
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8 posted 2008-02-16 10:22 AM


Beautiful romance. It must be the gated smile tiptoed into your heart.
Dark Stranger
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9 posted 2008-02-16 10:24 AM


TomMark, thanks my friend
Sunshine
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10 posted 2008-02-16 11:45 AM


I am enjoying this touch of window
and gloves...
and gated teeth.

Smiling here.

Toerag
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11 posted 2008-02-16 01:02 PM


everybody is always wanting to "tip toe"....yanno?....I can pretty much handle that myself yanno???...How ya been ????
Dark Stranger
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12 posted 2008-02-16 02:10 PM


ms sun, thanks lady friend

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bro toerag, thanks for the read and it is good to see you back amigo

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13 posted 2008-02-16 05:48 PM


I want love boots!
Midnitesun
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14 posted 2008-02-16 05:57 PM


"just out of the blue words
like from a mona lisa fence
of white teeth with gated smile"
Outstanding!

Dark Stranger
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15 posted 2008-02-17 07:27 AM


ms ali-san, flipflops with 3 inch heels?  thanks babe

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ms midnite..thank you so much for the read

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