Saving Money For Valentine's Day or Who Says Romance is Dead?

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Toerag
Member Ascendant

since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

0 posted 2008-02-13 11:28 AM

Tomorrow is for Valentines
So from the bottom of your heart,
Show your love how much you care,
And head out to K-mart.

Let your honey pick out a card,
One that she'll adore,
Read it there then put it back,
You'll save two bucks or more!!

Then just wait there patiently,
For a sale to be announced,
(Perhaps a blue light special)!!
On a mop or wool night gown.

Then take her out to supper,
(A dinner just for two),
Perhaps "Big-Mac" or "Whopper"
It's really up to you.

Then cruise on thru a graveyard,
(Flowers are always nice),
Grab a bottle of cheap champagne
(It's quite tasty over ice).

Tell her how much ya love her,
How you'd do anything for your mate.
Get out of your clothes immediately,
Before the kids awake!!

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

1 posted 2008-02-13 02:51 PM

cute

M

Bobby Jordan
Member

since 2007-08-13

Posts 491
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

2 posted 2008-02-13 03:37 PM

Toerag,

You got it down to a science.

I like your ideas for Valentines Day.

Bobby

TomMark
Member Elite

since 2007-07-27

Posts 2133
LA,CA

3 posted 2008-02-13 06:11 PM

everything but love.
Charmless.

Balladeer

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

4 posted 2008-02-13 07:01 PM

Well, you got the big mac part right. No woman would ask for anything more!

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

5 posted 2008-02-14 02:32 AM

You forgot the candy, perhaps a roll of lifesavers. Happy Valentines Day.
Ida

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

6 posted 2008-02-14 02:37 AM

This poem delighted me
and made me laugh out loud.

Alison

EagleScorpion
Senior Member

since 2000-03-08

Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever

7 posted 2008-02-14 03:34 AM

nice! a smile.. i needed that

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

8 posted 2008-02-14 09:47 AM

Yer my kinda man!

Here's a big V-Day kiss fer ya!

Pucker up, Big Boy!

If you was to throw in a Chiquita banana
I'd be yers forever!

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

9 posted 2008-02-14 09:56 AM

Woe, oh woe, is me... I think I'd be grateful for even that much romance! LOL

... you're not just saving money... you're saving the environment! LOL

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

10 posted 2008-02-14 09:59 AM

ToeMan~
You are a Valentine sweetie for sure~

Balladeer~
You meant Big MACK, right ?

Happy Valentine's Day to all~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~
~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - noles1@totcon.com

Lordadon
Junior Member

since 2008-02-14

Posts 18
Singapore

11 posted 2008-02-14 10:40 AM

I like how you split them up in four lines per stanza, easy to read, easy to take in the information before i continue. This poem is excitingly naughty=]

I'm not trying to bring you down, but on a side note, maybe you could put more emphasis on lines that you think are the most important, by making them shorter or longer. Sorry if what i say is wrong or you beg to differ, just my two cents.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

12 posted 2008-02-14 11:19 AM

lol

Toerag
Member Ascendant

since 1999-07-29

Posts 5622
Ala bam a

13 posted 2008-02-14 12:14 PM

Lordadon.....LOL...if you go back in history and read some of my garbage...you'll find that poetry is definitely not one of my stronger talents......

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