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passing shadows
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0 posted 2008-02-10 11:00 PM



People come and people go.
So what are you waiting for?
Do you not get the picture yet?
I don't want you or love you anymore.

How many times do you need to call
and get the voicemail then disconnect?
Don't you see it's much too late
to make up for the years of neglect?

I no longer need a hero
and if I do, I've got plenty to choose,
you don't call because you want to help,
it's because you can't stand to lose.

Well, eventually you will see,
you will come to accept what I already know,
you've lost and I can walk away
if you don't see fit to go.


© Copyright 2008 Dixie Lee Bullington - All Rights Reserved
JamesMichael
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1 posted 2008-02-11 03:43 AM


Yep...some discouragement should go a long way towards getting your point across...James
effjayel
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At the Crossroads of Infinity
2 posted 2008-02-11 05:56 AM


There are none so blind as those who cannot see....

Enjoyed this very much.    John

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
3 posted 2008-02-11 07:12 AM


an excellent next step


M

Angel4aKing
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4 posted 2008-02-11 01:04 PM


This hit home....and made me think....nice write

~~~kingsangel~~~

Bobby Jordan
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since 2007-08-13
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5 posted 2008-02-11 02:04 PM


Passing shadows,

This is very fine.  The only line that stumped me was the last one.  Is that line dialectal?

Bobby

simon
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since 2008-01-14
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6 posted 2008-02-11 02:27 PM


open, honest & to the point. Refreshing & I hope it quenchs the appropriate thirst...
TomMark
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7 posted 2008-02-11 02:48 PM


super good. You come back with a very strong and self-confident tune. SO very good.

But I do try not to read your poem of the late bad experience. It cut my heart through.

Take care. always with love. (D)

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