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Jaime Fradera
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0 posted 2008-02-10 12:03 PM



The Sun
By The Southern Cross
Now, after the storm,
the air is dry and clear.
now, after the rain,
the Sun is shining.
The Sun has been shining
for eons and for epochs,
across the entire span of geologic time.
On the morning I left home for good,
burning my bridges to the past,
on the day I traded Security for Freedom,
the same Sun was shining.
And last time that I lay in love,
remembered as though from a dream,
the same Sun was shining.
And even in my darkest hours,
when most I needed solace,
and no one else seemed with me,
the Sun shown always by my side.
I remember when I heard the news,
the Friday afternoon in second grade,
just as we were going out for recess,
that President Kennedy was dead in Dallas.
And I remember that they let us go home early;
and the feel
of the autumn sunshine on my face.
This same sun shown on the D-day armada,
on Lee and Grant at Appomattox,
on all the fabled cities of the past.
The Inca and Egyptians built their temples for the Sun.
The ancient Greeks
used the shadow of the Sun at noon
to compute the circle of the Earth,
as well as the circumference of the Moon.
And even early Homo Erectus,
pitiful and dirty,
his arms heavy with tree branches,
saw and felt the same Sun shining;
and for him it must have seemed the Light of God.
It intrigues me to think that on a steaming afternoon,
countless millions of years ago,
a time when tides ran higher,
when the Moon was not so far away,
when Earth spun faster in its circle,
and all the stars and continents were in the wrong places,
How, even way back then,
the same Sun was shining,
though the world it lit was different.
The Sun was there before the human race.
The sun was there when Life on Earth began.
The Sun was there before our Earth was born.

And there is no reason to doubt,
that perhaps a million million years from now,
though Earth might be a blasted radioactive rock,
and the human dynasty has long since passed, or gone to seed,
that the Earth will still be spinning,
the tides will still be sweeping,
the seasons, still coming and going,
the ice sheets, still ebbing and flowing,
the Sun, still rising and setting,
the Moon, still waxing and waning,
and the stars,
still tracing their ecliptic arcs
through astronomic spans
of Time
and Space.

I wish I knew how to make an accompanying and staggeringly beautiful abstract visual picture within which to surround this write,
something that could visually evoke the grand and cosmic sweep of geologic time,
and music from the harps of Space,
that, through harmonic and celestial tones, could define
the mind-paralyzing distances
between the stars ...
Pbs should run a two-hour Nova documentary
that would explore all of what the Sun has been and meant through all of human history.
The physics; what the Sun is made of;
and why it burns,
the workings of thermo-nuclear fire.
And how the Sun, and our world began.
And solar cycles, spots, and flares ...
the solar wind,
the chemistry of the Sun's corona and its core ...
and the beauty of its eclipses,
the spectrograph of its life giving heat and light.
and then there its crown of fiery comets ...
The associations and possibilities are endless
and fantastically fascinating.
but they will never come to me
to help them make the film.

Catch a falling star and put it in your pocket ...
(Perry Cumo)

...Florescent spheres
In diamond-studded galaxies ...
silver circles
return to energy.
(Country Joe and the Fish)
Southern cross



© Copyright 2008 The Sun - All Rights Reserved
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Member Rara Avis
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1 posted 2008-02-10 12:14 PM


Jaime,

Oh, the picture you painted is a Masterpiece.  I see it with vibrant colors splashed in oils, dried by the heat of the sun.

This is a keeper.

I love this part most of all:

And there is no reason to doubt,
that perhaps a million million years from now,
though Earth might be a blasted radioactive rock,
and the human dynasty has long since passed, or gone to seed,
that the Earth will still be spinning,
the tides will still be sweeping,
the seasons, still coming and going,
the ice sheets, still ebbing and flowing,
the Sun, still rising and setting,
the Moon, still waxing and waning,
and the stars,
still tracing their ecliptic arcs
through astronomic spans
of Time
and Space.

But, I love it all.  Every word just built upon each other.  I think the references to songs was brilliant.  Great job.

A

Bobby Jordan
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since 2007-08-13
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Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
2 posted 2008-02-10 12:57 PM


Jaime Fradera,

This is quite long.  However, I could find nothing to grab my interest.

Bobby

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Gaia
3 posted 2008-02-10 09:10 AM


Unlike Bobby, I find this piece interesting on a variety of levels.
Perhaps the movie-makers SHOULD ask you about your perceptions and imagery, and visualize some of the universe as you do.

Margherita
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4 posted 2008-02-10 09:31 AM


You know, dear Jaime, I got goosebumps reading this MASTERFUL piece! Wow, I love it and I will keep it.

Yesterday I watched the sunset, till the last flicker drowned into the sea horizon, it's something so overwhelming that really makes you ponder and feel the bliss of it all.

I deeply enjoyed this SUN work of yours.

love
Margherita


Artic Wind
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5 posted 2008-02-10 11:27 AM


interesting ! jamie!

ARCTIC WIND

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6 posted 2008-02-10 11:33 PM


You have great imagination and skill, Jaime.
I enjoyed this very much.
                                Ida

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