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passing shadows
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0 posted 2008-02-09 11:37 AM



Submissive.
Yes
I've always liked the man with power,
hard muscles and soft confess,

big blue eyes that let you know
the package has a bomb in it.

But

I suppose I need to change my ways
after being blown up so many times.

I'm getting much too old
to be going through my days

in pieces of unfinished rhymes.


© Copyright 2008 Dixie Lee Bullington - All Rights Reserved
Joyce Johnson
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1 posted 2008-02-09 11:52 AM


I especially liked the last line.  Joyce
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2 posted 2008-02-09 02:50 PM


Dixie,

I feel like I am chanting a mantra

but

your strength shows.

You can do what you want - because you have a great deal of inner strenght.  It shines through your poetry.

Alison

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3 posted 2008-02-09 03:00 PM


Yo, Passing shadows,

Nice work on this poem.

"You have a problem with hazel eyes, or what?"

Bobby

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4 posted 2008-02-09 03:01 PM


dixie, are you living my life on a parallel plane, or am I living yours?  I swear, girl, you write what I feel so many times.  I love reading you!

Sheli

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5 posted 2008-02-10 05:23 AM


Nice...James
Margherita
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6 posted 2008-02-10 08:37 AM


You might still go on loving this type of man, but maybe you will need a stronger shield to not let your heart getting hurt.

There are kind, sweet, comprehensive men, so lovable that you might think he is the right one to create a life bond. And then you will be grateful no doubt for the virtuous aspects, yet bored to death. There must be a golden middle way!!

You always make us think and ponder over your beautiful, insightful poems, dear Dixie.

love and hugs
Margherita

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7 posted 2008-02-10 11:12 AM


Dixie...WOW...This is really great. Thanks for sharing...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

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8 posted 2008-02-10 12:01 PM


Enjoyed! Dixie!

ARCTIC WIND

Rick
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9 posted 2008-02-10 12:24 PM


Dear Dixie, this line gave me a smile my friend.
big blue eyes that let you know
the package has a bomb in it.

very well expressed.
I enjoyed the read Dixie, all the pieces are coming together ok.

Rick

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10 posted 2008-02-10 01:28 PM


Dixie

It seems to me you have all the pieces require to finish the puzzle, now go de-fuse the situation...!

John

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11 posted 2008-02-10 03:13 PM


thanks everyone

glad you enjoyed this piece

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