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Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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0 posted 2008-02-03 03:05 AM




No
it doesn’t bother me
I knew it would be this way
you being straightforward
me being complex

And
your doors are open for a reason
in fact they were never closed
the locks were broken well before
the handles were in place

Yes
your windows still attract
all the eyes of passersby
who crave to know you
for a brief moment in time

But
your mystery is unscrambling
slowly as your buttons fall
and your eyes linger
on the inner sides of my smile

For
it’s there that I glimpse your soul


Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

[This message has been edited by Roniece Dawson-Bruce (02-04-2008 03:13 AM).]

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1 posted 2008-02-03 04:24 AM


Roniece,

Truly wonderful and a keeper for sure.

A

simon
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2 posted 2008-02-03 06:56 AM


RDB,

I think your writing is so true & it always seems so effortless. Like this lots...

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2008-02-03 07:21 AM


ms r & b, interesting perception, enjoyed it
Margherita
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4 posted 2008-02-03 10:47 AM


A very intriguing write, dear Roniece!

Brava!

baci
Margherita

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5 posted 2008-02-03 11:53 AM


Very Interesting!

ARCTIC WIND

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6 posted 2008-02-03 02:17 PM


Roniece, how lovely this is!

I love the form! Just perfect!


JamesMichael
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7 posted 2008-02-03 02:36 PM


Like the way you open your heart...nice things come out...James
Bobby Jordan
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8 posted 2008-02-03 04:48 PM


Yo RDB,

Keep your eyes off my soul.  It's private property.

Loved this poem.

Bobby

secondhanddreampoet
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9 posted 2008-02-03 08:37 PM


a fine and most interesting 'write!'

I am especially fond of the imagery of:

"myster(ies)...unscrambling
(with)...
eyes linger(ing)
on the inner sides of (a) smile(!)

For

it’s there that I glimpse your soul"

v. serious, sustained applause of this 'penning!'

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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10 posted 2008-02-04 02:26 AM


Ali.... you are very special to me - thank you

Simon... thank you so much for your very generous comments

Mr Daark... perception sometimes is over rated   thank you

Margherita... ooh I love being intrigued! thank you  

Arctic...thank you, I do so enjoy you reading my work

Dixie... you are beautiful... thank you

James... thank you that was a lovely comment

Bobby...I love the 'yo' and I always respect private property   thank you  

Bruce... you always make me smile.. thank you my friend  


Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

poddarku
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11 posted 2008-02-19 09:28 AM


your doors are open for a reason
in fact they were never closed

wonderful,wonderful


Pilgrimage
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12 posted 2008-02-19 09:58 AM


"on the inner sides of my smile" -- I love that description.  And I really like the construction of this one, it adds to the impact of the poem.  

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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Gaia
13 posted 2008-02-19 11:35 AM


I love 'inner' smiles!
Earth Angel
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14 posted 2008-02-19 12:30 PM


..."your eyes linger
on the inner sides of my smile

For
it’s there that I glimpse your soul"

~ Oh, Roneice, I actually had a little quiver with the beauty of your soulful words.

~ and you, Radiant One, know all about smiles!

Loving hug 'n a smile,

Linda

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