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vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

0 posted 2008-01-28 12:04 PM

Cloudy day,
Still autumn here,
Misty morning,
Across the bridge,
Driving through these roads,
Lonely love without the nights
of you,
And remembering the thought of you,
Taking my hand,
In the amber rust morning,
When you smiled
and took me to the highest mountain
Wandering in the wind breeze,
And clouds roll by ,
Still smiling through these open roads,
Smiling today,
When you took my hand,
Time so right,
Stars are so bright,
Smiling,
Driving through these broken promises
of this lonely road,
Wondering how time went by
And brought this lost love,
Into lonely misty morning,
And when you took my hand
I felt upon this clouds,
Through this love again,
When you took my hand,
love was so true,

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

1 posted 2008-01-28 12:37 PM

Vandana, I am sure every woman at least once in her life have asked the very same thing. I loved these lines:

Driving through these broken promises
of this lonely road,
Wondering how time went by
And brought this lost love,
Into lonely misty morning

I do believe you have inspired a poem in my "finally" with this piece.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

2 posted 2008-01-28 01:11 PM

Very nicely rendered, dear Vandana! You are getting better and better.

love
Margherita

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

3 posted 2008-01-28 01:15 PM

I love the 'autumn rust morning" ~ what a perfect description for fall early hours.

vandana, this is a lovely poem.

Alison

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

4 posted 2008-01-31 07:05 AM

Vandana... I do so enjoy your lovely words... love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

5 posted 2008-01-31 08:50 AM

strong emotions here, painted with pretty colors.

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

6 posted 2008-01-31 09:21 AM

"And remembering the thought of you,
Taking my hand,
In the amber rust morning,
When you smiled"

love this!

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

7 posted 2008-01-31 12:31 PM

Very Strong Emotions in this piece!

ARCTIC WIND

Songbird
Member Elite

since 1999-12-15

Posts 2184
Missouri

8 posted 2008-02-02 03:56 PM

So very lovely, I enjoyed reading it.

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

9 posted 2008-02-02 04:00 PM

Vandanna sweetie you have grown so much in your writing. What you write here is something we all can relate to for sure.

Charisma

Member Ascendant

since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

10 posted 2008-02-02 04:42 PM

Driving through these broken promises
of this lonely road,
Wondering how time went by
And brought this lost love,
Into lonely misty morning,
And when you took my hand
I felt upon this clouds,
Through this love again,
When you took my hand,
love was so true,

Beautifully penned!!!

(((hugs))
Charisma

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