A Fistful of Rhymes Part 2: For a Few Rhymes More...

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simon
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since 2008-01-14

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0 posted 2008-01-27 05:23 PM

And as he sat in Wetherspoon's, drinkin' whiskey and eating some pie, the Kid caught his eye. Lookin' kinda cocky in the corner. Eyes front, chest out, a huff a puffin', scared of nothing, it was like lookin' in a twenty year old mirror. The Kid caught his gaze and called back across,
'And who might you be sirrah?'

Well the cowboy couldn't quite believe what he was hearin'. Did this kid know how close to trouble he was nearin'? He really should be more careful of the words he was selectin' to use. He was clearly neglectin' the kind of respectin' that he thought was the least of his dues. So in the roughest, toughest General Custer voice he could muster he called back,

'D'ya wanna know who I am son? I'm the last cowboy in Wolverhamp-ton'

'No' said the Kid, 'That ain't right. You ain't the last no, not quite. See I'm a cowboy too, a much better one than you. Why don't you come outside? Then we'll see what you can do.'

Well the cowboy threw back his liquor. A test to find out who was quicker? This kid had a big mouth and he'd just put both feet in. All this kind of talk made the cowboy baulk on the piece of pork on the end of his fork that he was currently eatin'.

But did he have this kid's beatin'? The gauntlet had been thrown to the groung and he couldn't let word get round that anyone had his defeatin'

And this was his chance for that one final dance with the annals of history. Like all those heroes he'd seen on the silver screen and at Xmas on t.v.

And all these thoughts went running through his head 'til eventually, 'Yeah o.k. that sounds like fun' he said.

TO BE CONTINUED...

Bobby Jordan
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1 posted 2008-01-27 05:49 PM

Yo Simon,

Is this London?

It sounds more like the Bull Ring in Birmingham.

I like this loads.

Bobby

simon
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2 posted 2008-01-27 06:00 PM

Thanx Bobby. I always regard praise from yourself as high praise indeed so again, thank you. This is set in Wolverhampton which is quite near Birmingham & is somewhere I once had the dubious pleasure of living.

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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3 posted 2008-01-27 08:07 PM

oh Simon, I enjoyed this... now carry on, I need to find out what happens next please!

love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Artic Wind
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4 posted 2008-01-27 09:34 PM

very much Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

JamesMichael
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5 posted 2008-01-28 12:50 PM

Fine writing...James

simon
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6 posted 2008-01-28 06:31 AM

Thank you so much James & Arctic Wind, your feedback makes me so happy.

RDB: Do you realise the ammount of happiness that you regulary spread? Thank you so much for your lovely comments, they've made my day (& it's only 11 AM!)

SEA

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Member Seraphic

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7 posted 2008-01-28 09:24 AM

I'm enjoying this story very much...is there a part three yet? I don't want to miss it

simon
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since 2008-01-14

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8 posted 2008-01-28 10:02 AM

Oh Sea, thank you so much!

Every comment means so much to me!

There will be a part 3 & at the moment it's just bubbling away in my head...

Earth Angel
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9 posted 2008-01-28 10:03 AM

Aha! I looked for the sequel ~ and I found it! ~ and VERY much enjoyed it! I like your story-telling style! It read like a story but was rhyming and metered!

I'm staying tuned for part three of this western saga!

Great job, Simon!

Saddle up, cowboy!

EA

simon
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since 2008-01-14

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London, England

10 posted 2008-01-28 10:15 AM

Thank you so much EA. I feel I've put myself under a bit of pressure now. whoops!
I don't really know where I'm going with this! Still, thank you so much for your comments. They make it all worthwhile...

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