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Fall Out of Love
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Fall Out of Love |
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Gunslinger Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 901TX, USA 
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I poured a cup of coffee, while the rain was pouring down. The cloudy sky a heavy hand, on our south Texas town. I walked out on the front porch, and I leaned against the rail, And for the thousandth time, I asked myself just where I’d failed. Was it time I didn’t give you, as I spent it on the job- Was it failure to consider, it was you my work did rob? Or could it simply be that, when the push turned into shove- We thought about it carefully, and then fell out of love? I really cannot answer all the questions life does pose- My mind is filled with sad regret; I crushed a lovely rose. The tender flower of first love, so delicate and pure- The harshness of reality, so seldom can endure. I wonder why the hand of fate, in arbitrary choice- Does twist the tapestry of lives, give pathos to their voice. Sometimes it seems, that darts of doubt, like lightning from above- Shatter hearts, and hearths, and homes, when we fall out of love. |
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Bobby Jordan Member
since 2007-08-13
Posts 491Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Gunslinger, This has a great rhyme scheme. As far as the topic goes--well--it's been done to death. That's okay though, it's a very popular idea. Bobby |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
wonderful writing... sadly beautiful... love RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed reading this...James |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
The theme is so true and so normal, and do I ever enjoy reading what you say, you do it well. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Very Much Enjoyed ARCTIC WIND |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Maybe a theme read before, but so uniquely you. You are among my favorite writers ~ and lost love, sadly, is a topic we are all familiar with. Alison |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
heartbreakingly beautiful, John...  "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I don't agree with Bobby at all about both your poems. Perhaps he should read them a second time. The themes you wrote about were not just simply lost love. They are very original and your personal thoughts about your own particular circumstances. It worries me that you seem to think that it was all your fault. I think it is highly unlikely. - Owl |
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