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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2008-01-25 05:28 PM


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Let me still
Pass by you
On my way
To another day
Without you

The sun slowly
Above the crest
On a snowy hill

A pair of swings
Stiffly sway
In the cold dawn air

From the shore
Of the frozen bay
One can hear
The seagulls cry


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Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2008-01-25 05:35 PM


Nicely done, John.
I enjoy hearing seagulls cry.

TomMark
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2 posted 2008-01-25 05:35 PM


sad. but beautiful!!!!
are we all crying for life? or only seagull?
Sun or moon, who makes snow live longer?

oh,  just a sad day.

have a safe weekend, dear John.

secondhanddreampoet
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3 posted 2008-01-25 05:53 PM


The beginning and end of this 'write' are especially fine!

applause!

Bobby Jordan
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4 posted 2008-01-25 08:48 PM


Huan Yi,

Very good work.  I can picture it.  We get sea gulls in the parking lot of our inner-city shopping mall.

It's fun to see and hear them.  They travel about fifty miles from the shore just to be with us.  We feed them.

BTW, I really like whitefish.

Bobby

[This message has been edited by Bobby Jordan (01-26-2008 03:23 PM).]

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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5 posted 2008-01-26 12:12 PM


you have such beauty in your words John... enjoyed..  love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

aziza
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6 posted 2008-01-26 03:00 PM


The swings are what got to me.

They seem so lonely as I see them in my mind -

A

JamesMichael
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7 posted 2008-01-29 02:35 PM


Very nice...James
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8 posted 2008-01-29 05:26 PM


Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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