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Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis
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0 posted 2008-01-19 03:25 AM


He was a party of one
and the party never ended,
until they found him dead
on his front porch one morning.
Party's over,
time to go home.
    
              Ida Werrett

© Copyright 2008 Ida Werrett - All Rights Reserved
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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1 posted 2008-01-19 03:37 AM


... oh that's a bit sad.. perhaps he might continue his partying where he is going? nicely put... RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Bobby Jordan
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2 posted 2008-01-19 09:24 AM


Ida,

Not a bad way to quit the party.  We should all be so lucky.

Nice little piece.

Bobby

poddarku
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india
3 posted 2008-01-19 09:27 AM


it is good. i shall have them on my grave's head stone.


Margherita
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4 posted 2008-01-19 10:57 AM


and hopefully the party will go on on another level, making him feel less lonely, celebrating with "milk and honey" instead and hugs to no end...

So sad, dear Ida, but rendered with a great realistic touch that does not permit indifference.

love
Margherita

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
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So. El Monte, California
5 posted 2008-01-19 11:40 AM


Thank You all for your comments,
Bobby, I wish he had been "so lucky"
but when you drink and party until you're in your fifties, the body rebels at the abuse and some unpleasant things happen.
                                    Ida

TomMark
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6 posted 2008-01-19 12:33 PM


interesting.

love the read.
tom

aziza
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7 posted 2008-01-22 12:47 PM


Ida,

Good poem.

A

secondhanddreampoet
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8 posted 2008-01-22 06:41 PM


finely succinct 'reality' write with a definitive and effective message!

applause!

LindsayP
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9 posted 2008-01-22 08:14 PM



That is very sad Ida dear, not the fact that he died, but the fact that he died

alone. Let's hope there will be a party waiting for him where ever he goes.

Have a happy day Ida and God Bless.
Lindsay

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