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Tomer
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since 2002-06-28
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Michigan

0 posted 2008-01-18 11:44 PM



I can feel I’m tired,
I don’t listen when the sun rises
Adjacent to the memories that
Dress the wooden tiles that beneath me.

That beneath the nearest train,
Raveling the window faced stores,
Playing with one another off
The corner of the Eastside street,
As the pebbles sleep in-between
The cracks coffined next to the two lane streets
With each piece of a different story
Sitting side by side in the left
Corner of each cars seep.

The day caves,
Docks the nights harbor
Where the 5th floor apartment sleep.

Their eyes a nights dim,
Tomorrow, every hour.


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Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
1 posted 2008-01-19 10:50 AM


There is a very special feel to this poem. You painted an impressive picture.

Their eyes a nights dim,
Tomorrow, every hour.




love,
Margherita

TomMark
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since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133
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2 posted 2008-01-19 12:45 PM


I can feel I’m tired,
I don’t listen when the sun rises
Adjacent to the memories that
Dress the wooden tiles that beneath me.


The rails? Who knows past, today and future and he is tired.


That beneath the nearest train,
Raveling the window faced stores,
Playing with one another off
The corner of the Eastside street,
As the pebbles sleep in-between
The cracks coffined next to the two lane streets
With each piece of a different story
Sitting side by side in the left
Corner of each cars seep.


the city life reflected in the train window.

The day caves,
Docks the nights harbor
Where the 5th floor apartment sleep.

Their eyes a nights dim,
Tomorrow, every hour.


the economy?

This is a very interesting poem and i like to read it. but i surely not know if i get it.

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