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in seasons of the rain

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serenity blaze
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0 posted 01-17-2008 05:52 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for serenity blaze

Wait for me-- encouragement--I will write a symphony;
and angels will dive perilous to hear my shy note quivering
trembling the last note left
hanging on the treble cleft
dangling the precipice of how far I have to fall.

Cheer me on, as I gulp pints, I will prove to you good sport.
I'll spurt the foam through my blown nose and slam it, all victorious
cross-eyed, bottoming the top
with all the brough-ha-ha--heh-ha
dizzy in the jubilance of the moment of the thrall.

And if I see you look away?
A hint of disapproval may
prompt me to don my white gloves
and scold myself in want of love--
I'll be anything at all
just tell me
what
is it
you want...

I'll pick up a dauber's brush and pluck at my own eyelashes
just to get a movement right, delicate in crevices
as a shadow argues line
as if it were the end of time
waiting on a sundial, in seasons of the rain.

* * *

With thanks to the folks in C/A and chopsticks--I made that change suggested, and jim? I kept the "encouragement" because it suited me to do so.

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JamesMichael
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1 posted 01-17-2008 06:08 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Fine writing...James
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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2 posted 01-17-2008 09:02 PM       View Profile for Roniece Dawson-Bruce   Email Roniece Dawson-Bruce   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Roniece Dawson-Bruce

Serenity... I really am in awe of your wonderful writings... loved this!  love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Ceinwyn
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3 posted 01-17-2008 09:08 PM       View Profile for Ceinwyn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ceinwyn

  Karen this is amazing! Love ya!

If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried.
nakdthoughts
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4 posted 01-18-2008 05:33 AM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

And if I see you look away?
A hint of disapproval may
prompt me to don my white gloves
and scold myself in want of love--
I'll be anything at all
just tell me
what
is it
you want...


sad thing is  they should love us for who we are...not what or how they want us to be.


M
Susan Caldwell
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5 posted 01-18-2008 07:34 AM       View Profile for Susan Caldwell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Susan Caldwell

"And if I see you look away?
A hint of disapproval may
prompt me to don my white gloves
and scold myself in want of love--
I'll be anything at all
just tell me
what
is it
you want..."

this for me was perfection...both the words and the woman.

this "they should love us for who we are"..I disagree...I don't expect everyone to love me for who I am...some just can't/won't take me as I am and I understand that...My rule is to decide if who they are is someone I can live with. If not..I walk away.  Now if I could just do that from the get go..

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Paul Wilson
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6 posted 01-19-2008 11:08 AM       View Profile for Paul Wilson   Email Paul Wilson   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Paul Wilson

Karen...Sounds like you are gearing up for the Mardi Gras season. LOL. Done in a style all your own, that no one can duplicate.
Enjoyed...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

Margherita
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7 posted 01-19-2008 11:28 AM       View Profile for Margherita   Email Margherita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Margherita

Wait for me-- encouragement--I will write a symphony;
and angels will dive perilous to hear my shy note quivering
trembling the last note left
hanging on the treble cleft
dangling the precipice of how far I have to fall.


Gosh, Karen, this is simply dazzling!

love,
Margherita
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8 posted 11-28-2009 01:00 AM       View Profile for latearrival   Email latearrival   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for latearrival

This is so right on. Needs more readers. jo
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9 posted 11-28-2009 01:01 AM       View Profile for latearrival   Email latearrival   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for latearrival

forgot to save
serenity blaze
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10 posted 11-28-2009 05:25 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

and I forgot to thank you...

nod

usually, it's the ones that are my heart that I ignore.

Jo? (((((((((((((( }}}}}}}}}}}}}

I love you all.
sandgrain
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11 posted 11-28-2009 03:00 PM       View Profile for sandgrain   Email sandgrain   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for sandgrain

I'm so glad someone brought this up again as some of these old slow people miss things, ya know.  Your words are music at it's finest, dear one.  I love it.

God bless,
Rae
 
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