Open Poetry #41 |
Swords to Plowshares |
Treagal Junior Member
since 2008-01-08
Posts 38 |
Swords to plowshares Out of the ramparts of war Letting down your battle hardened face Into golden yellow fields, Where you were once a child, So cheerful and up beat- But now the slowing beats, Of a dead man's hand Are all that you can hear. Raising up to the sky Your keen edged sickle To cut down your new foe- A tall yielding specimen Of harvest times design. So gentle a sway to the wind, Flowing together as one. If only the field of battle- Could reap and sow like this. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This evokes feelings of resignation and sadness. Though I may not be reading correctly, it seems someone won (on a level?)a battle but lost the war. |
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Allogenes Junior Member
since 2008-01-16
Posts 35 |
At first glance, this poem seems to depict a man desperately trying to adjust to the half-forgotten rigors of Peace Time Living after the de-humanizing experience of warfare: searching for his enemy in the fields of swaying wheat; unable to capture the lost innocence of childhood. The last line is haunting, and conveys to me an almost sinister undertone: it seems to say, in effect: "If only the enemy we're as yielding as this passive field." A good poem. |
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Treagal Junior Member
since 2008-01-08
Posts 38 |
Yes! Allogenes that was exactly what I was trying to convey with this poem! This is still a work in progress, but it def. feels sinister every time I read it at the end. |
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