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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2008-01-04 06:37 AM

something about the sand
and black and white
and read all over

you laughing at my eyes
how they search for flaws
in the text of your pores

or punctuation out of place
perhaps not enough commas
for pauses there or here

so you hurry your story on
hoping I will turn more pages
and want to get to your ending

and work my way back from there

____________

daark

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2008-01-04 08:59 AM

You peeked...!

Enjoyed this very much, D.

Kahlil
Senior Member

since 2003-04-12

Posts 1881

2 posted 2008-01-04 09:05 AM

no edits
just devour

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

3 posted 2008-01-04 12:03 PM

good read

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

4 posted 2008-01-04 03:00 PM

ms sun, thanks babe

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ms vandana, thank you for the read

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ms kahlil, thank you for touching this one

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

5 posted 2008-01-04 05:38 PM

very very nice Mr Daark...

RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

6 posted 2008-01-04 05:50 PM

Hi DS....I wonder if sometimes knowing the ending gives the beginning reason to make a middle.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

7 posted 2008-01-04 07:16 PM

quote:
so you hurry your story on
hoping I will turn more pages
and want to get to your ending

and work my way back from there

you might scatter some pebbles to find your way back ... just in case!

Intriguing.

Love,
Margherita

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

8 posted 2008-01-04 09:02 PM

ms R & B, thanks lady friend

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ms martie, thank you neighbor for being in the middle of the way back

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ms mar, thanks for the touch and pebbles

aziza
Member Elite

since 2006-07-09

Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!

9 posted 2008-01-05 01:08 AM

I always read a bit of the last page first - the suspense distracts from the beauty of the story.

Love this.
A

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

10 posted 2008-01-05 04:01 AM

I read from the back to the front...thanks ms az

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-09-23

Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown

11 posted 2008-01-05 05:35 PM

Very much enjoyed this write. Please skip me! I am sure I have many flaws.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

12 posted 2008-01-06 07:42 AM

ms smart...the flaws and scars are the content of most good reading are they not? thanks ms

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