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Old Man Willow
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Old Man Willow |
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trevorskogsbergh Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 129South Pasadena, CA 
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A wooded hollow Surrounded by sound Lie’s in the realm of us Chilling winds And swaying trees Amongst themselves discuss How old man willow Used to be The oldest tree around Until Mother Nature Decided that It was time to lay him down The lightning struck And thunder roared The rain came from the sky And old man willow Held his ground He didn’t want to die “You’ve lived your life.” Said Mother Nature “It’s time to lay your seed. We must make way For other life Be silent and take heed.” But old man willow Old and dismayed Didn’t hear her words He stood his ground His roots held fast Not a single branch did stir “Mother Nature!” Cried old man willow “Please don’t end my life. So many creatures Depend upon me It just doesn’t at all seem right.” But Mother Nature Wise beyond years Just looked at him and said, “Dear old man willow It’s your destiny You seeds you must spread.” Old man willow Then realized her intent A feeling within him grew It’s time to create More room for life This is something he always knew The wind picked up His branches flailed His time was at an end Old man willow Began to fall And his trunk started to bend A crack was heard Throughout the forest A sadness felt around Old man willow On his side A single seed upon the ground The storm had ended Poor old man His life not given in vain That single seed Would grow and grow A willow would sprout again The wooded hollow Surrounded by sound Beneath the shaded glen If we believe In destiny Our lives will start again Better to die, and sleep The never-waking sleep, than linger on And dare to live when the souls life is gone. [This message has been edited by trevorskogsbergh (01-04-2008 06:56 AM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Nice writing, T. (I'm not messing with that name) and this is what I believe also. Ida |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Wonderful write, I loved the personification of the Old Willow. You conveyed deep emotion. And I believe in transformation. In a way or another life goes on. Margherita |
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trevorskogsbergh Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 129South Pasadena, CA |
Thanks for writing your nice things. I posted at another site and here's what I got: http://www.everypoet.org/pffa/showthread.php?t=58031 These guys were brutal. I appreciate the critique and all but man o man. I didn't expect this. Better to die, and sleep |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I tried that site too, T. There's a bunch of very nasty people there who think they are something they are not and they get points for criticizing others. You will find some truly talented people on this site who don't have to tear others down to make themslves feel better. American Poems is another good site. Welcome to the site, I think you will enjoy it here. Ida |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This is the kind of writing that sticks with you...I believe it should experience one more ride to the top...James |
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