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A New Day (A New Life)
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A New Day (A New Life) |
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Lincoln Member
since 2007-12-03
Posts 62Earth 
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I woke up, and put my feet on the floor Today is a new day, a glorious day Sitting, sipping, looking out my window The sunrise in the distance I know i'm not the only one watching I'm carrying those stars with me I'm Turning my smile into something real I'm going to rise I'm going to dream I'm going to take a breath, and try again "When your deepest thoughts are broken, keep on dreaming boy, cause when you stop dreaming it's time to die." -Shannon Hoon [This message has been edited by Lincoln (12-16-2007 11:36 PM).] |
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Thalen Junior Member
since 2007-12-15
Posts 35New Jersey, USA |
My only thing, is that the last stanza, seems almost flippant, and unnecessary. But other then that <3 it. |
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Lincoln Member
since 2007-12-03
Posts 62Earth |
Thanks Thalen  "When your deepest thoughts are broken, keep on dreaming boy, cause when you stop dreaming it's time to die." -Shannon Hoon |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I love it! Very uplifting! Beautiful! Love, Margherita |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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