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Clipped wings (senryu)
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Clipped wings (senryu) |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity 
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 * * * Soft words were spoken yet clipped wings need time to heal dark corners beckon * * * |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
this made me smile... I understand it very well.  |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Felt those emotions Hope |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
lovely! Nice to finally 'see' you |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Lovely margherita ARCTIC WIND |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Timing...James |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Margherita Is that one of your feathers falling from the heavenly blue? If that be true, I be dismayed. All your feathers should be aloft with gentle breezes and not fall into dark corners. If you need some added love, I'm sending some your way.  Linda |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
I'm glad that there were only soft words spoken and not angry ones Margherita But don't stay in those dark corners too long, You're too nice a lady for that, Take care Lindsay |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Thank you all for your kind and loving comments on this one. There are some dark moments every now and then, but I always find the way out into the light again. A special thank you to dear Linda and dear Lindsay, I am fine, your words comforted me. Love, Margherita |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
A feather drifing in blue... captures wings in gentle haiku The subtle nuance of your writing leaves a very poignant impact. Beautifully done! ~ Karen |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Not quite living in solitude, still got the kids and if they slam the door hard enough the snow falls off the trees. Nearest neighbor 10 acres away. I think if you changed "heal" to "mend" or something like that, it would be better and the 17 count would be correct... I understand it's a language thing... much love Sis dale |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Thank you dear Karen and dear Dale for coming in here and commenting so kindly. Dale ... "off the trees??!!" now that is some mighty power! I thought "off the roof"! I can't make up my mind with the wicked two-syllable "clipped" wings thing!! "cut" would be too drastic, they couldn't heal anymore I guess?  (btw they are healed by now, so it's better I don't insist on finding a solution to this syllable problem). Thank you anyway!... still thinking ... yet clipped wings heal slowly maybe ...  |
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