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openmind
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since 2007-11-05
Posts 12


0 posted 2007-12-11 12:03 PM


Another entry into this book, but whats this poem about
A mother left her kids with some crooks,so she could roam the town
High heels and a miniskirt, she's not going to church
Ideas of a living for her, trying to see what she is worth
Job applications? no thats not her style
It's a mirage and she's wasting her life and a beautiful smile
Quick cash, back seat who cares it's fast money..


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Angel4aKing
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since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372
USA
1 posted 2007-12-11 12:11 PM


I personnally would end this one with a tear drop....how many depends on what circumstance allows....have a great christmas and a happy new year....JAC

~~~kingsangel~~~

Just another Pete
Member
since 2007-12-06
Posts 74
Scotland
2 posted 2007-12-11 06:07 AM


Depends if you have more that you definitely want to say about her, the crooks or her children. If not I'd be tempted to leave it with unanswered questions to the reader i.e. what is she worth and who cares, but that's just me and my general weirdness.
chickoo007
Member
since 2007-11-06
Posts 70
India
3 posted 2007-12-11 09:56 AM


Just do this,i do it all the time whey i get a block
Write a sentence a continuos one without any full stops with all that you can feel keep writing till you get the thoughts...
When you are finished you will find that the block is gone away with
A remedy by Mr.Richard(my english teacher)
He said that a writer's block is not lack of ideas but abundance of them
try it you will certainly feel better

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
4 posted 2007-12-11 03:19 PM


Very Much enjoyed !!!!



ARCTIC WIND

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