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time prophet
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In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees

0 posted 2007-12-10 06:23 PM


I am from a land of ancient tall trees
where the grass is green
and the sea of blue
washes the sand clean

I am from a man
delivered of a woman
who gave nothing but love
and for whom I had none

I am from a childhood of dreams
and visions of friends
denied as figments
of an overactive imagination

I am from the love once found
but lost in dying
cast upon the shadow world
forlorn of ever finding it again

I am from many journeys
in the killing fields and beyond
of a crazy world
where politicians were never wrong

I am from the darkness
of a mind gone wrong
in forgetting
to remember yesterday

Ultimately I am lost from the love
that could sustain me
in the finality of human frailty
and penultimate fall from grace

© Copyright 2007 Frank Bennett - All Rights Reserved
Artic Wind
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Realm of Supernatural
1 posted 2007-12-10 06:25 PM


Very Much Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
2 posted 2007-12-10 10:18 PM


You are from caring and will always have the many friends you have made over the years who enjoy reading you and have missed your words of late~~


M

iliana
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3 posted 2007-12-11 02:22 AM


Excellent piece and response to Patricia's challenge!  (But I hope you are not lost from love forever.)
Honeybunch
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4 posted 2007-12-11 02:40 AM


"Ultimately I am lost from the love
that could sustain me
in the finality of human frailty
and penultimate fall from grace"

Yes, it always seems that way when what is inside doesn't come out.  Perhaps the reason for that is "choice".  Some can know but not know what the ultimate result of that choice is but even in the "not knowing" there can be an ever present sadness for those who are lost.

Good to see your words again!

Marchmadness
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5 posted 2007-12-11 02:56 AM


Hi Timeprophet, I don't believe we've met but I enjoyed your sad but beautiful poem very much. What a wonderful talent you have.
                              Ida

chickoo007
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6 posted 2007-12-11 03:27 AM


Superb is all that i can say!!!!
Way to GO...

Earth Angel
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7 posted 2007-12-12 12:47 PM


Please know that extreme external pressure upon a lump of coal, can morph it into a beautiful, multi-faceted diamond!

A very moving "I Am From" journey.


EA

time prophet
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8 posted 2007-12-12 05:47 PM


Artic Wind,

Thank you for the read, and enjoyment.

time prophet
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9 posted 2007-12-12 05:49 PM


Nakdthoughts,

Maureen, sometimes circumstance influences the mood of the write. Thank you for the kind words.

time prophet
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10 posted 2007-12-12 05:50 PM


iliana,

Appreciate the response, maybe not, perhaps I just gave up searching.

time prophet
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11 posted 2007-12-12 05:58 PM


Honeybunch,

Helen, Probably locked away too long and some of the choices proved wrong. Perhaps a compass would prevent further loss.

time prophet
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12 posted 2007-12-12 06:00 PM


Marchmadness,

Ida, We haven't met, but then my posts are few and far between, thank you for the gracious comments.

time prophet
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In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees
13 posted 2007-12-12 06:01 PM


chickoo007,

Thank you the comments are appreciated.

time prophet
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14 posted 2007-12-12 06:03 PM


Earth Angel,

Your thoughtful comment merely shows off the diamond that we all know you to be.

Honeybunch
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15 posted 2007-12-13 03:08 PM


tp - Navigate by the stars - they shine in the dark!
Just another Pete
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16 posted 2007-12-13 03:49 PM


This is very good, really enjoyed reading it, for me second stanza is the one that stands out. Will be back for more
Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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17 posted 2007-12-13 08:43 PM


wonderful words here - thank you for sharing a piece of you... RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

time prophet
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In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees
18 posted 2007-12-13 09:40 PM


Honeybunch,

Only if the clouds stay away, may have to stick with the compass.

time prophet
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19 posted 2007-12-13 09:41 PM


Just another Pete,

Pleased you stopped by, and equally that you find some interest.

time prophet
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In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees
20 posted 2007-12-13 09:43 PM


Roniece Dawson-Bruce,

Thank you for the comments, just a small piece in a wide slice of time.

Honeybunch
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21 posted 2007-12-14 12:22 PM


tp - And lightening can strike an external device so maybe retreat to the guidance within.  
Chanson
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22 posted 2007-12-15 07:29 AM


May your compass never fail.

A lovely, flowing read, as always.

OwlSA
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23 posted 2007-12-15 10:27 AM


I ache with your sadness.  My favourite line is the first.  My second favourite is all the rest.  Earth Angel's response is, as you say, so sustaining and so her.

- Owl

passing shadows
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24 posted 2007-12-15 02:20 PM


TP, good to read you again

glad you rose to the challenge

aziza
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25 posted 2007-12-15 03:07 PM


There is so much power in this poem.

So much to think about - to mull over and return to.  Fine writing.

A

I am from a man
delivered of a woman
who gave nothing but love
and for whom I had none

Amazing writing!

time prophet
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In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees
26 posted 2007-12-16 04:30 PM


Chanson,

D, The compass remains functional as long as there are no magnets nearby. A pleasure to see you still visit.

time prophet
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27 posted 2007-12-16 04:33 PM


OwlSA,

The sadness comes from experience, and the experience allows recognition to put it in it's place. Thank you for your comments.

time prophet
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28 posted 2007-12-16 04:36 PM


passing shadows,

Dixie, normally by the time I manage to write something for a challenge it has long been buried, for once the brain was quick enough. Or maybe it was the mood I was in.

time prophet
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In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees
29 posted 2007-12-16 04:38 PM


Honeybunch,

Helen, Then I shall have to ensure that I do not stand out above the surroundings.

Chanson
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30 posted 2007-12-16 07:33 PM


F, thank you but the pleasure to read you is mine.
I actually sat down to write a poem today (it would have been my first poem in 3 or 4 years) but it ended up in the trashcan. Since I can't write, I take pleasure in reading others' fine poetry and musings. Keep it coming, please.

Honeybunch
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31 posted 2007-12-17 02:15 AM


tp - A compass for the lowly and humble state of man that will never find the gold with false perceptions of the soul!  


Helen

time prophet
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32 posted 2007-12-17 02:24 PM


aziza,

Thank you for your most gracious comments.

time prophet
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33 posted 2007-12-17 02:26 PM


Chanson,

D, There is no such thing as can't, just stay away from the trash can and post.

time prophet
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34 posted 2007-12-17 02:28 PM


Honeybunch,

H, then I may be related to an Ostrich with my head always buried in the sand, a most unbecoming stance as one always has their rear stuck up in the air.

Honeybunch
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35 posted 2007-12-17 05:02 PM


tp - Hmm?  And that brings us back to choice, you know.  If one chooses to be like an ostrich then one must know one is going to be kicked or pushed face down onto the ground.  Even angels could not resist that open invitation.     Okay, I'll stop now that we've come back to the start of it all, i.e. "choice".

Be well and ... "know"!
Helen

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