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nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

0 posted 2007-12-10 07:17 AM



Never Quite There


Maybe I have found my niche,
aloneness, needing to accept
that victory has been my past
and that today, standing in the rain,
soaked with thought,
my life's journey is over.

I've tried to keep it simple,
doing without much that is popular
and thought to be of value
by today's standards.

I have been broken, stripped of dignity,
constantly looking inside my heart
only to blame myself for feeling.

There is no future to dream of,
only whisperings of more hardships.
Too stubborn to give in, but
tired of the soaking and the flooding
of yesterday's thoughts and today's actions
that lead nowhere.

M

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

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Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2007-12-10 07:36 AM


MsBliss~
With rich thoughts like this -
'standing in the rain,
soaked with thought'
-
your time is far from over~

Love and LOTS of *Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email -     noles1@totcon.com   

latearrival
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2 posted 2007-12-10 07:40 AM


"my life's journey is over".

Dear youg lady. It is my duty to let you know that "the best is yet to be". You are far too young to give in to this feeling. best to you "late"

icebox
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3 posted 2007-12-10 08:32 AM



I know these feelings; they are old friends.

Yet, I also have learned the past is another country; we don't live there anymore and the future is music as yet unwritten.

It is a gift and a blessing though at times a burden to see, to feel, to know, and to feel apart from those for whom the doors of perception are less open.

Thank you for sharing this poetry of your's.

SmartChick
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On A Journey To The Unknown
4 posted 2007-12-10 10:23 AM


Awwww maureen, I feel the very same way. This time of year, that lonely feeling is so strong.
Honeybunch
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5 posted 2007-12-10 11:37 AM


M - I certainly can relate to the feelings expressed in your poem.  These days I find myself quite often saying, "At this particular moment, I am fine, everything's fine" and in that moment it is.  
Enjoyed your words!

Artic Wind
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6 posted 2007-12-10 03:21 PM


feeling good is the trick, the cure is to eat COMFORT FOOD ! LOL



ARCTIC WIND

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7 posted 2007-12-10 06:09 PM


I know that niche, hopefully the future will be surprising and todays actions will only seem to lead nowhere.

Pete.

secondhanddreampoet
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8 posted 2007-12-10 06:38 PM


The daily struggle for basal survival amid this "Runaway American Dream"
[the raging contemporary corporate mediocracy that once was the grandest
'experiment' in participatory democracy (of "Jeffersonian purity") in the history
of humankind]...the sham, drudgery, hypocrisy, greed, lies; manipulation; etc.
that tend to demean and destroy 'sensitive souls' (empathic/compassionate folk)
often has me dancin' with the "dark wolf!" (depression)...and yet, there are rather
wise words in several 'comment/replies' to this 'write' [particularly those of Ms.
Marge and Mr. "Icebox'!]...the 'past' is dead...the 'future' as yet powerless to be born...
we have only the 'now' to sculpt!  Though we may be the ever-vanishing few (tiny
'wilderness voices')...'the world' (all of humanity) desperately needs each and every
one of us, living (by example) and speaking our 'truths' quietly and clearly in absolutely
every media prose (and poetry) forum we can find!

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Deep in the heart
9 posted 2007-12-10 07:22 PM


I've read this a half dozen times and still don't know how to respond other than to say ..
You rock!

Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Huan Yi
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10 posted 2007-12-10 07:24 PM


.


Your Shoulders Hold Up the World
by Carlos Drummond de Andrade translated by Mark Strand


http://culturalbaggage.blogspot.com/2007/06/carlos-drummond-de-andrade.html

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nakdthoughts
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11 posted 2007-12-10 10:31 PM


I appreciate and thank  you for your wonderful responses...

"I" as always you make me smile

and John, thank you for the link, incredible poems on that site. I read from one to the next all of which say it better than I.

M

iliana
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12 posted 2007-12-11 03:24 AM


Maureen, I would reiterate what Icebox wrote in his response to this heartache of a poem (albeit in your usual excellent manner), but I could not restate it nearly as well as he said it.  I'm reminded of something my Mom always said:  that we are never given more than we can bare.  Hang in there....a new day will come.   .....jo
JamesMichael
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13 posted 2007-12-11 04:51 AM


Read something in one of my favorite books that seems to apply here..."Our willingness to let go of all the good things that we have ever received from anyone in the past allows this very thing to grow in our relationship now and to be even stronger and more generative in the present than it was in the past"...the book is "If It Hurts, It Isn't Love" by Chuck Spezzano, Ph.D...James
nakdthoughts
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14 posted 2007-12-11 06:14 AM


Thanks JamesM...this has nothing to do with  love  just life and society in general and what I see in teaching children: their lack of respect, their lack of social skills and the fact that they are probably lucky if they spend 2 hours each day, other than sleeping, with their parents or guardians and if they do have weekends together they are enrolled in other activities rather than getting to share time with their families.

When 7-8 year olds have to be suspended for spitting in each others faces, for punching another out, for threatening to kill... all in reaction to what is a "normal" school day, it makes  one think whether one can make a difference.

JamesMichael
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15 posted 2007-12-11 05:33 PM


I'm sure you are making a difference...even though the environment sounds difficult...
Looks like I'm not very good at interpreting the intent of poems...at least not this time...James

nakdthoughts
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16 posted 2007-12-11 06:20 PM


That's alright James, I am just in a "funk" trying to figure out whether I am  right for teaching~~ something I have always loved.


M

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17 posted 2007-12-12 09:05 PM


Maureen,

    When I read this, I understood.   I, too, work with children, and try so hard to help them fix all their problems.  I've been told that's impossible-just love 'em.  It is evident you do that!   I'm sure you make a fine teacher with a lot of heart and creativity.  Hang in there!

From one T to another,

cathy

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18 posted 2007-12-12 09:33 PM


M, my friend, it sounds as though you need a change...I know what that feeling is like and you wrote it perfectly.

'Something different' is a good thing, especially to brighten those winter blues.

You've done lots of soul searching and the answers are there indeed. They are just hard to find sometimes.

vandana
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19 posted 2007-12-13 11:26 AM


good read
Chanson
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20 posted 2007-12-15 07:32 AM


M, you are 'just right' as you are.
(Busy-ness may keep me from the net but you are thought of. *s)

OwlSA
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21 posted 2007-12-15 10:21 AM


I feel your pain - and mine.  Hang in there.  I'm trying to, as well.

- Owl

nakdthoughts
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22 posted 2008-11-03 05:26 PM


I wonder what one would do without the friendships made   Thank you all

M

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