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Taking the Blade (Repost in Response to Serenity's Tarot Challenge - Three of Swords)

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iliana
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since 12-05-2003
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0 posted 12-09-2007 10:19 PM       View Profile for iliana   Email iliana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for iliana

Blindfolded,
blind and folded
into creases of time,
long hours rehearsing,
this rhyme,
the thrower and
the assistant,
precision’s cold embrace.
Him throwing,
her frozen
daring not to breath,
to move,
to speak.
Dodging his blades
by remaining invisible,
untouched,
she is saved.
While he attempts to engrave her
with his being,
his attitudes and pessimism,
snappy moments
intended to carve deep wounds
of voided passion,
to swift flick her with his pain.
Today, she flinched
and bent into the dagger
taking it to the heart.
Balance gave way to age.
Steel through soft flesh scathed.
A bleeding heart remained
bound to the wheel
ever turning still,
and his sharpened will
penetrated every feel
she might have felt
had he stopped after one,
stopped the wheel that spun,
unbound her hands,
ungagged her tongue,
and removed the sting of what he’d done.  
Blind and folded into time,
frozen forever now is his rhyme.

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Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 09-16-2007
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Realm of Supernatural


1 posted 12-09-2007 11:05 PM       View Profile for Artic Wind   Email Artic Wind   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Artic Wind

Iliana-

Very much Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND
Margherita
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since 02-08-2003
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Eternity


2 posted 12-10-2007 12:10 PM       View Profile for Margherita   Email Margherita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Margherita

Again I'm impressed, dear Jo, by your fantastic poetic skill.

A bleeding heart remained
bound to the wheel
ever turning still,
and his sharpened will
penetrated every feel
she might have felt


Such intensity. Karen too will be delighted!

Love,
Margherita

Just another Pete
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since 12-06-2007
Posts 74
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3 posted 12-10-2007 06:33 PM       View Profile for Just another Pete   Email Just another Pete   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Just another Pete

Ooh I like that line "had he stopped after one" so much said there in so few words. Enjoyed very much.
Pete.
Earth Angel
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4 posted 12-11-2007 08:35 AM       View Profile for Earth Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Earth Angel's Home Page   View IP for Earth Angel

"Dodging his blades
by remaining invisible,
untouched,
she is saved."

~ Whew! I'm pleased that there can be something positive about this card ~ which for me personally, is the most dreaded one to crop up when I do a reading. Thankfully, it seldom ever raises its ugly head!

Love to you, sweet poetess ~ and sorceress! lol

Linda
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5 posted 12-11-2007 09:45 AM       View Profile for chickoo007   Email chickoo007   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for chickoo007

Today, she flinched
and bent into the dagger
taking it to the heart.


Oh man what can i say of these lines!!!!
I felt a sense of nervousness and anxiety as i read through your poem
Simply amazing!!!!!!!
serenity blaze
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6 posted 12-11-2007 09:52 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Well now.

This is a dark one. (Did I miss this one, or was I just "gone fishin" again?)

This is most appropriate my dearest jo jo!

Sharp, but to the point?

grin



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