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Angel4aKing
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since 2006-09-27
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0 posted 2007-12-09 12:29 PM



he arrived right on time
two minutes too late
woke up with his wifes mother
and did nothing at all
because his were tied
and now things are seen
just a little clearer

and who said

she

would be

any fairer....

~~~kingsangel~~~

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Just another Pete
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since 2007-12-06
Posts 74
Scotland
1 posted 2007-12-09 08:04 AM


"he arrived right on time
two minutes too late"

Nice tone setting opening lines - this is a real puzzle with alot behind it. Can I ask who the speaker is and what relationship she/he has to the husband & the mother in the poem?

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16
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Realm of Supernatural
2 posted 2007-12-09 01:15 PM


I never have seen your work before,!

I really enjoyed



ARCTIC WIND

Angel4aKing
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since 2006-09-27
Posts 1372
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3 posted 2007-12-10 11:08 PM


well there once was a man.....no just kidding....it's just some insight into life, and the ability to see, no matter how tinted the rosse is on the lens....by the way I don't think he ever did....percieve her any fairer that is...

~~~kingsangel~~~

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