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Temperance (The Tarot Challenge)

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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden


0 posted 12-06-2007 03:14 PM       View Profile for Allysa   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Allysa

My angel with his
drunken wings,
his constant walking-
stum-ble-ing

And
I am abrasive-
I broke those things
this balance
that always hangs between

Where
my fingers twist
and grasp the rings
to pull him from
the everything-

But,
when do we fall?

    
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Margherita
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Eternity


1 posted 12-06-2007 05:13 PM       View Profile for Margherita   Email Margherita   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Margherita

Perfect!

Temperance is so hard to accomplish ... the lack of it so dangerous.

Beautifully rendered.

Love,
Margherita
Pilgrimage
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2 posted 12-06-2007 05:24 PM       View Profile for Pilgrimage   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Pilgrimage

Allysa, I love the first stanza.  But those last five words in the poem were beyond love.  Fantastic.  

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

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3 posted 12-06-2007 05:44 PM       View Profile for Just another Pete   Email Just another Pete   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Just another Pete

The tao of temperance - very much enjoyed.

Pete
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4 posted 12-06-2007 08:07 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Yanno what I love about you? Is that your work keeps evolving, and while I am consistently thrilled with your poetry, I am always happily surprised as well.

Thanks Allysa, for joining us. (I've got 71 more cards up my sleeve.) No wonder I'm lumpy. *grin*

iliana
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5 posted 12-07-2007 12:23 AM       View Profile for iliana   Email iliana   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for iliana

Wow, Allysa, this is so uniquely written and the ending just blew me away (along with that really great picture -- did you draw that??).  *hugs*....jo
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6 posted 12-07-2007 12:31 AM       View Profile for Earth Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Earth Angel's Home Page   View IP for Earth Angel

Allysa, I am always fascinated by the intuited interpretations of Tarot cards as opposed to the textbook versions. Mind you, I learned the latter and then tucked what I learned in the back recesses of my mind. I am a bit like Picasso in that regard ~ I learn the rules and then I break them! lol

I enjoyed reading your rendition of the Temperance card!  


EA
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Allysa,

reading you is like sipping slowly a fine after dinner brandy, soft with a slight aroma of almond, which is delightful and sooths the soul...with a surprise in each and every ending....

marvelous write....and so good to see you

jwesley
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8 posted 12-07-2007 09:25 AM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

Fantastic this was....very, very enjoyed...

jimmy
 
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