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lucky
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0 posted 2007-12-05 04:00 PM



I am...... a distant
cry came over the years
a crumpled pile of old broken
cares wasn't so much but I called
it home some where between
the time I arrived and the
time I move on may
lie the reason

why

I am


Speaking of ghosts, wouldn't you know here comes mine again...
~Rosemary J. Gwaltney~


© Copyright 2007 Dale W. Gwaltney - All Rights Reserved
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Deep in the heart
1 posted 2007-12-05 04:04 PM


Very well done

aziza
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2 posted 2007-12-05 05:31 PM


I agree
Nicely done.

A

Patricia
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3 posted 2007-12-05 06:02 PM


Eloquently stated.  Well done!  Thank you for your words.

Patricia

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4 posted 2007-12-05 06:26 PM


Oh, my! I should get my eyes checked! I thought the first line of your poem read that you were a dentist!

I'm glad that you shared how you came to be the I am that you are!

Isn't this a rousing great challenge?!?


EA

Martie
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5 posted 2007-12-06 12:34 PM


Dale

I'm just glad that you are.

Misty Lilacs
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6 posted 2007-12-06 09:05 AM


WOW! This is great.

Home is not where you live,
but where they understand you!
       ~~ Cristion Morgenstern

TinaTrivett
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7 posted 2007-12-06 09:10 AM


Nice job, lucky. Thank you.
Susan Caldwell
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8 posted 2007-12-06 09:45 AM


I don't just enjoy what you write, but also how you think..it makes me smile every time it opens a door for me.

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Pilgrimage
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9 posted 2007-12-06 11:13 AM


Oh yeah.  Between the coming and the going, there is home.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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10 posted 2007-12-06 08:27 PM


Dale - you are a very lucky man - enjoyed RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

iliana
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11 posted 2007-12-07 12:07 PM


Really enjoyed ready your poem, Lucky.....jo
secondhanddreampoet
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12 posted 2007-12-07 04:56 PM


interesting response to the 'poetic challenge!'

I especially like the ending!

Applause!!

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13 posted 2007-12-07 05:08 PM


"some where between
the time I arrived and the
time I move on may
lie the reason

why

I am"

This struck such a chord in me, I think I'll actually remember it. Y'got some wisdom goin' on, lucky.

Thank you for being.

We're the lucky ones, m'friend.


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