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"Not Again" (Patricia's challenge)
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"Not Again" (Patricia's challenge) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I was formed from Texas mud red clay striped to cobalt blue mixed with Raceland's swampy soup where life thrives only within shells. I was conceived by an impulse a night of "sorry" make-up lust both of them were in the cups "sssssshhhhhhhhh" Don't wake the tribe. From snarls to growls to giggled blush a bid, attempt, to repair trust threats of "I have had enough" morphed to murmered pleas of "more". News of my conception thus received with resignation of a pardon in revoke. The struggle to survive ensued. Betrayal lined my mother's womb. There was no wonder left in her. I am a child of Texas dirt muddying the floor, she swore that I was the last of dots of ellipses she had wrought.... each one she'd thought a period. Timing always was my sin. I broke the pattern of the sets. I come from groans of "not again" born with a caul of love's regret. I am from a moment, wild-- proverbial motherless child regarded as a death I am the dark rebellion of breath apparent in the frigid gasp remorseless, loud, and unabashed laughter at the funeral beside the open casket of the viewing of the corpse of dreams. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You are...amazing! I've been looking over your challenge as well, and pondering... Serenity, thank you so much for taking part of this wonderful challenge... I don't know that we can ever learn enough of our favorite friends and poets.  |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Karen, I got to get back to this - but for now I hope it isn't true. best friends best finds dale |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
~ and from out of the richness of Texas soil, was borne the poetess who came to be known as pip's Serene One.  Darlin', and you still Blaze trails where'er you go! ~ and that's a goood thang! Now I know where the drama in your ink comes from. winky wink btw, I just noticed the ring in your pip photo. I don't know if it is on your thumb with your right hand crossed over, or not. I wear an Atlantean healing ring on my right thumb and it appears to me as though you are wearing one, as well. That would be rather curious if that be the case. Linda |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well heck at least one great thing came out of Texas that I personally can vouch for  Great poem sweetie, just a piece of you can go a long, long way. (That was a compliment yanno?) |
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aziza Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy! |
I agree with mysteria. You are one reason why I entrenched myself here on these blue pages. You are interesting and I am a fan of your writing. Alison |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Your writing never fails to entice and enthrall  Poet, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
I absolutely agree with Karilea...you are amazing! Serenity, thank you so much for bringing your words to this challenge. Patricia |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
K, I admire you and your writing. And besides, if you came out of Texas, it can't be THAT bad of a state (considering that's where I'm going next week... grin). Is it weird that I constantly want to hug you and tell you how worthwhile you are and how amazing you are and how glad I am to know you, even if it's only over this lovely interweb? |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
sometimes the worse situation begots the best outcome... you are a most wonderful gift, regardless of the circumstance. I for one am a better person having known you. but how you wrote this goes beyond depth and feeling...raw and unafraid to share this part of you...that is what makes me love you so very, very much... I envy your courage.  "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I feel deep admiration for your writing capabilities, and for the person that you are Karen. Whenever I find your words, I am always blessed with an enjoyable experience. Talent m'friend, you abound with it!!  |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
extremely powerful, personal, very real, emotive 'write!' ...amazing response to the 'poetic challenge!' [not surprising to see something of this magnitude of quality from this fine author!] an amplified spectrum of that most serious and sustained applause!! |
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Devious Intellectual Member
since 2006-05-08
Posts 112 |
I like how you came off the beginning with the story feel perfected. Nice write |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Karen! Wow, I just paused in my breath for this impressive poetic rendering! Not again But the seed was good and bloomed to perfection. Love and hugs. Margherita |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you all for reading, and yes, it's true, I was an unplanned pregnancy. And okay, so it's also true my mom had a lot of depression regarding my conception. (She still feels guilty about that.) But folks, we have "hugged it out".  We like each other AND we love each other. And I completely understand her too. If somebody told me right now that I had to have ANOTHER baby???  But all's well that ends well, I say. Someday I'll have to write about how my mother became my father and my father became my mother, so you can full understand how I turned out so mixed up!  Thanks again for the love! smoochies |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
You are...~~huggable~~ and worthy of all the respect shown here M |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karen dear...when the seed takes root in soil so holding to the truth of beginning, the worthy flowers from it bloom all year long.  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
If I didn't know you, I'd say this was a very dark poem (*grins*) but I like it very much. I nearly cracked up when I read the title....until I realized you were talking about your mum. Gritty and real writing, Ser! (And did I say good? Yes, really good!) lubsya.........jojo |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Serenity... I love where you are from! RDB |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL, you are definitely 'royal' mud, a jewel created by in sparkling moment of passion...even if your mom 'shuddered' NO's, your glow could not be stopped! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
as always you never cease to amaze and stun...great tribute comes to those who see through and have known the lover, life....grand poem, missy...enjoyed |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling--and laughing with Kacy--yanno? I like to think that before my arrival, my four brothers and sisters were like fingers on a hand. I am the thumb. Now I ask you, where would mankind be without the opposable thumb, eh? That's right. *laughing* I civilized my family.  Love you all! And I'm gonna have to get my baby picture scanned--I swear I was born laughing! (Good thing, eh?) And Mom--I swear--I was not laughing at you.  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
 [This message has been edited by Sunshine (12-07-2007 06:14 PM).] |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
I love this! When I read this, it was goosebump time: "Timing always was my sin. I broke the pattern of the sets. I come from groans of "not again" born with a caul of love's regret." Poignantly beautiful. By the way, you were CUTE! |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
This is just so good Karen. I lov it all the way around. I love the pic and the glasses. I would have snatched you up if I hadn't already met Rosemary. I knew who the smart girls were, and I can see that in you. I'll get a letter off to you today or tomorrow, fill you in, drop you an early pic of RJ back when we were kids growing up together. lov it lov it lov it Sis |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Well, since i have been on this site, i have found that you are a very successful poet!, I really enjoy your work!  ARCTIC WIND |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
grin...Rosemary? I have such bad self-esteem, all I can dwell on is the past-tense-- you were cute! laughing Well, the glasses are similar, but my rims are definitely groovier now. and lucky--you can still snatch me up, but only if I can call you and Rosemary Ma and Pa. thanks, you two--ya'll make me believe in all the good stuff again. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
That's my Ser! Look at you.....you were a show off even back then! *cracking up* |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
You can't keep a good women down. Karen And as for your Mom, sometimes poverty and hardship just makes people want to give up.I'm sure it didn't have anything to do with you personally. Ida |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Karen... Loved the rawness of this poem. Proud of the roads you have traveled and where you come from. That Raceland soup must have made you the way you are LOL. Love the picture, looks like a girl I use to push on the merry go round till she got sick. LOL...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"motherless child regarded as a death I am" ...but we are all the finest sort. *grin* |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I'm too ashamed to admit this but I read and reread this until I could think of something smart to say. And well I don't. Other than you always amaze me with that thing you do so well.. You know that thing with your words. I'm not a good responder type person to this poetry stuff. But it's going to be a new year so I'll work harder at this. If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
Karen, I've Known you for a long time. This explains a lot I think. Well I think it's one of your best works. tottally enjoyed adagio |
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Klassy Lassy Member Elite
since 2005-06-28
Posts 2187Oregon |
Karen, Your writing just astounds me with the courage and grit it takes to write it "like it is...or was." None of my kids were planned, and for the longest time, my son thought that made him a mistake, no matter what I said to him. It took years for him to come to know how bereft I would be without him. he's a cryptic man now who flaunts a dry sense of humor to cover the chinks in his armor. Truth be known, he's a tremendous gift in my life. Your poem, with its terrific press of words and heart, made me remember some tough days... ~ Karen |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Karen, my admiration of you (first) and your poetry (a very close second) grows with every interaction. Your courage and your honesty are two of your top 1104 qualities! I am sorry for the sadness, but so glad (and envious) that you hugged it all out. One of your top 1104+ fans - Owl |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You guys are always so kind. And KlassyLassy? You live up to your name. I'm not sure if I felt like a "mistake" but I think that a lot of kids who grow up in a poor family share a sense of guilt of being a burden. But I'll save that stuff for Dr. Phil. I just wanted to let you know how much I appreciate you. You guys consistently stun me to silennce with the generosity of your replies.  |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
Gal, you really know how to evoke emotion! I had tears rolling as I read that. Then I read all the comments of the multitudes who also just love you to pieces and I'm smiling ear to ear. The piece is amazing, as are you. Rae |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Serenity, I too have read and reread this and only stayed away from it because as you know I would go on and on with my stories..LOL. I could say more than you might care to read. But you were born and you are here. For that I am so pleased. Thank your mother for me. It could have easily gone another way but it didn't. Now we are all blessed with having you to read and learn from. respectfuly. "late" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
mj? how aptly your name, "latearrival" applies to me! Please share your stories--if you hadn't shared that one in particular, I would have stopped writing completely if I thought myself able to do so. You are a dear friend, and I thank you. (I'll be checking my e mail. )Rae? You are also so near and dear to my heart. Thank you so much, for holding me up when my knees were buckling. Have a joyous holiday, and please trust that you have never left my heart or thoughts. I should have known, we know the tree by its fruit...thank you so much, for not giving up on me, even at my most thoughtless. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I haven't hugged my Owl in so long, she is asking "WHO?" sigh forgive me Diana? I love whoo. |
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