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smellmyfinger
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since 2007-12-02
Posts 21
Wyoming,Natrona

0 posted 2007-12-02 12:25 PM



The fog keeps rolling on
Suffocating until we’re gone
Watch your sons and daughters
In the harshest of waters
Drown beneath the sea

The coastline washed away
Storms rushed in disarray
The aqua was overcoming
Lights barely humming
Gently beneath the sea

Metal eroded from the pressure
An absence would never deter
An old sailor sank crying
Afraid of never dying
Crushed beneath the sea

There’s no more beauty in this
It has all sunk into the abyss
In the saltiest of waters
This species has faltered
Trampled beneath the sea

Tears expanded the world
As waves swiftly twirled
Hope plunged far below
It was lost long ago
Thrust beneath the sea

Eyes soon began to close
Seeing the ancients ghosts
They were grimly seeing
The end of a human being
Dying beneath the sea

Gaze into the future
Eye what we will endure
The end beneath the sea

© Copyright 2007 David Lamb - All Rights Reserved
Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural
1 posted 2007-12-02 12:28 PM


Very powerful First post you got there!

Welcome To pip!

You will love it here, you will have so many friends, and all of us get along together very well! Great and powerful first post

ARCTIC WIND

aziza
Member Elite
since 2006-07-09
Posts 2995
Lumpy Oatmeal makes me Crazy!
2 posted 2007-12-02 12:28 PM


Welcome to PiP.

I really like this poem
(and I have to admit, I am still laughing over your name)

Again, welcome.

A

smellmyfinger
Junior Member
since 2007-12-02
Posts 21
Wyoming,Natrona
3 posted 2007-12-02 12:31 PM


thanks =) I have been writing for 2 years and love it. I can't wait to get to know you guys better
TomMark
Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133
LA,CA
4 posted 2007-12-02 12:42 PM


beautiful poem. love the read.

welcome to PIPtalk the wonderful place.

Tom

kudanesh
Member
since 2007-12-01
Posts 135
Peterborough,England
5 posted 2007-12-02 12:44 PM


yes i love the way it goes to gether powerful thats the way it should be good job

ps:sorry bout my spelling

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
6 posted 2007-12-02 12:53 PM


Hello! I hope that you will enjoy sailing pip's blue seas!

~ Some say that mankind originally emerged from the sea! ~ and I suppose it only makes sense that we will return to the sea! lol

Giving you a warm, welcoming pip hug,

Earth Angel

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

7 posted 2007-12-02 09:31 AM


Hi.  I enjoyed your first post.  I hope that you will enjoy your time among us and I am looking forward to reading more from your pen.
dgvarner
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since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida
8 posted 2007-12-02 02:58 PM


great writing...enjoyed!

Welcome to the blue pages

g

"...Never regret anything that made you smile..."

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